The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Before presenting my statement, I would like to start with the definition of "leadership". It is a famous quote in the business world recently that "Leadership happens when there is a first follower", and this perfectly illustrates my perspective of leadership, meaning that when people are willing to follow a certain person to make things happen together, that's the core of leadership. Based on this definition, I generally agree with the prompt and believe that cooperation forms better leadership than competition.
To begin with, the first follower actually stems from his or her trust in the people who leads the change. For example, there was a serious protest toward trade regulations with China since the regulations might harm the democracy of Taiwan. Back then, the leader was a student who didn't have any affiliation with a political party, but he still successfully activated people's participation to stop the regulations in that people believe that he initiated the protest with no political agenda. Therefore, what I would like to emphasize is that "trust" is the critical element to incite people to involve in any reform when there was a leader. Indeed, this kind of trust is almost impossible to be driven by competition, and cooperation is a better way to cultivate this kind of trust.
Additionally, the function of leadership is to organize people to work together on challenges that are generally impossible to be solved by the individual. Hence, the leadership acquired by competition is an unstable element for the following cooperation since people may not be convinced by this type of leadership. A notorious example in Taiwan was that the leader of one big company was chosen because of his strategy to spread the calumny of his competitors. However, the whole company collapsed after his succession due to losing the trust of their employees. Therefore, the leadership forms from cooperation instead of competition can stabilize the organization and make a long way of the future progress.
Admittedly, people may argue that cooperation sometimes do not create the same level of efficiency of competition since more discussions are required. However, I would say this view is too myopic in that efficiency may seem critical in the short-term but it can also take the price of long-term success. For instance, some tech-companies in Silicon Valley do compete fiercely in the beginning but they tend to lose the long-term driving force to keep up the development of the company due to the inability to keep their employees.
To sum up, I do believe cooperation is the best way to unite people to make changes together, and this is also the scenario that requires the leadership the most.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, however, may, so, still, then, therefore, for example, for instance, kind of, to begin with, to start with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2311.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 445.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19325842697 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19092419568 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505617977528 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 734.4 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3025534121 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.941176471 118.986275619 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1764705882 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.94117647059 5.21951772744 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137797886427 0.243740707755 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0491710308638 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042307052536 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0850535102823 0.150359130593 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264567412257 0.0667264976115 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.1392134831 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.8420337079 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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