The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The claim states that instilling a sense of cooperation, rather than competition is the best way to prepare a society’s young people for leadership in government, industry, and other fields. All these areas mentioned demand leaders who are co-operative with their peers, easily approachable, and capable of meeting challenges involved by working in coordination with many people. Today, this lack of co-operation in between leaders of different bodies, raising from their egoistic and self-centered minds, and lack of regard for others’ views and opinions, is costing a lot for the bodies to co-exist and uplift each other.
Today, nation-wide discussions involving major decisions, affecting the prosperity of thousands of people, challenge leaders to have open minds to others’ perspectives and experiential knowledge, and to have cooperative minds. Instead of approaching the government as a service body for people, the industry only for the economy of the country, and arts for entertainment, leaders and board members should consider how one industry can influence and help in the development of the other. A cooperative mindset, if developed in the young minds of the country can be very beneficial for its prosperity.
Competition, although sometimes the cause for the rat race mindset of people, trampling one to get ahead of another, isn’t a very bad virtue. The healthy competition gives people an idea of their capabilities, once they become aware of their peers' achievements. It also motivates and inspires them to dream and challenge their own limitations.
Apart from co-operation and competition, there are a lot of virtues and skills that are essential for leaders to contribute well to their roles. These involve a critical mind to understand the functioning of their area of work, the system involved, the culture and traits of the people, great management of people involved by their knowing strengths and weaknesses etc. So leadership demands a lot more qualities than just co-operation and a competitive mindset.
Although the claim points out cooperation, a missing quality in the leaders with competitive minds,it is not just the only quality required to fulfil a role sometimes. Hence, young people require different skills for fulfilling different roles and just co-operation might not be sufficient sometimes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 99, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, still, well, apart from
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1988.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 363.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47658402204 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09616627894 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 215.323595506 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561983471074 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.7035246018 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.0 118.986275619 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9285714286 23.4991977007 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217873216053 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0799271715688 0.0831039109588 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0811639924061 0.0758088955206 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115500586058 0.150359130593 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603951994816 0.0667264976115 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.8420337079 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 12.1639044944 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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