How should society prepare its young people, through cooperation or competition? The speaker recommends going with the former. Although I believe somewhat cooperation is needed, I mostly disagree with the speaker's recommendation.
Firstly, the world runs more with the competition, less with cooperation. In other words, every nation competes with each other in order to find perfection. Even in our schooling system, students compete with each other in achieving success in their academic careers. Even though students mostly learn with cooperation, sharing their notes and helping one another in understanding complex theories and maths, at the end of the day, they sit in the examination with their competitive mind to suppress one another. I tend to support such competition because if there were no competition, how will they, and society, understand that one is fit to lead the society for its welfare, other is not. After all, not everyone will lead a society or a nation.
Secondly, people help society to thrive with their competitive attitude. In order to compete and suppress others, people tend to one works hard to acquire the required knowledge and ideas, and that eventually helps society to acquire more. If there is no competition, why would anyone feel the need to step forward to achieve anything?
Although, some may believe, with cooperation people help each other grow and learn which is more helpful for both themselves and society. In fact, they are right, to some extent. However, without competition people do not really find the impetus to work for the betterment of society and the world. Consider the car industries, for example. Audi, Mercedes, BMW, Ferrari, Lamborghini, etc. all are competing with is other to grow bigger and better than others with the help of modern technology. If one creates a good sports car, another creates a better one control of the market, and then another comes with a new one, and the fight to take control over the market continues. Such competition is not only good for the respective companies, but also healthier for the economy, government, and the nation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 206, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'speakers'' or 'speaker's'?
Suggestion: speakers'; speaker's
...n is needed, I mostly disagree with the speakers recommendation. Firstly, the world r...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, after all, for example, in fact, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1786.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 346.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16184971098 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73935386683 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554913294798 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.3563492004 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.3 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 5.21951772744 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176759982443 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611551981705 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581313277593 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114864688828 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430016641097 0.0667264976115 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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