The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The development of a nation and society as a whole is steered by the action of current generation who act as the driving force. It is the duty of this same generation to make sure that they spend efforts trying to make the new and young generation well equipped to handle their roles in future. This is because the new generation will be the future driving force. They must be provided with the best available education facilities along with receiving societal values. The aim is to make the future or the young generation intellectually, resourcefully and socially progressed than the precedent generations. Thus, the methods and strategies applied to ensure this progression need to be carefully devised for they shape and influence the future developments.
One of the methods of making sure that the youth do their best is by the strategy of competition. This is a method that has been in practise since a long time and it has been quite successful. The psychology of humans makes them perform better when they face competition. A competitor motivates an individual and ensures that he transcends his limitations and gives his best. The individual has a parameter to judge their performance ( compare their performance with that of their competitor ), whereas this is absent if there is no competition. An individual also learns a great deal by observing his/her competitor and the interactions add value to their knowledge. However, this method does have some drawbacks, although it does ensure a parameter to judge performance, the competitive mindset may be detrimental in the long run. An individual with such a mindset will focus only on the competition and fail to learn through the process. The results (winning or losing) matter more to him/her than the actual learning he /she has gained through the exercise. This attitude is particularly harmful when team work is expected, when you are expected not only to do well yourself but also co-ordinate with people and think holistically. A good leader must always look at the bigger picture.
The other method which is not so common but is quite effective and preferable is the method of co-operation. The method states that the youth should be taught leadership not through competition but through co-operation. A leader must be able to work with different kind of people, he must be an effective communicator and should have good people management skills. These are essential skills when it comes to leadership as a leader will always have to work with a team, ensure good progress and development of the team members as well. Teaching co-operation skills will help them to have a better understanding of situation, how to negotiate and how to delegate responsibilites to team members based on their skills. It helps make a better leader by putting them in conditions which they will face in real life when they lead a project.
In conclusion, a leader should have two qualities - he must be a good individual who is best at what he/she does and he must be a good facilitator, a good communicator and have good people management skills. An individual who is excellent at what he does individually might not turn out to be a good leader, thus we must also concentrate on inducing a sense of co-operation in the youth. When these youth grow up and become responsible leaders who will be handling complex tasks that require working not only with their own team but also across teams and platforms this sense of co-operation that we induce in them will definitely help them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ion well equipped to handle their roles in future. This is because the new generation wil...
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...when they face competition. A competitor motivates an individual and ensures that...
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...erformance with that of their competitor , whereas this is absent if there is no c...
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...ense of co-operation in the youth. When these youth grow up and become responsible leaders ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, thus, well, whereas, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 33.0505617978 185% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 12.9106741573 194% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2940.0 2235.4752809 132% => OK
No of words: 594.0 442.535393258 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94949494949 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93681225224 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.919347371 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446127946128 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 914.4 704.065955056 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 17.0 4.99550561798 340% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4341145129 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.076923077 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8461538462 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.15384615385 5.21951772744 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0839175247708 0.243740707755 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0246392751333 0.0831039109588 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.020226412334 0.0758088955206 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0520327254217 0.150359130593 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0132996899942 0.0667264976115 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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