The best way for society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The notion states that the best way to prepare the young people is by instilling the sense of cooperation and not competition. This notion raises very vital point and needs to be analysed very carefully since these young people are the ones who are going to build the future of our nation. Some might agree with the issue, however, I stand to disagree by stating points to strengthen in the following essay.
A child in its young age is like a clay and can be moulded up into any shape to that he can become a strong, skilled and competent personality in future. A child needs to be bold enough to face the real world after he is on his feet. The corporate world is not as friendly or pampering like the family or society will be to us. Hence it becomes very vital for a child to be aware of these situations.
The only way a child can know the harshness of the world outside will be in his youg age prior to the time when he actually gets experienced. Surrounding the childs perception of zero competitiveness can lead to childs skills not reaching at par since there is no base fear to fail and then utimately work harder to get success. The reality can be even tougher for a leader. That is because, to become a leader, first of all one has to gain trust of many so that they percieve you to be a capable person to be followed. One also needs to work his best to compete with others who stand parallel for becoming a leader. The best example can sate many oppositions come in wa to become a political leader during the election process.
Leaders are not born, they are to be build. In ones' prilimnary stages, if exposed with competitive surrounding, helps push his potential and also gives a true picture of how much more does he needs to ahcieve. Todays world is not same compassionate as it used to be in past. It has grown to be more complicated and more self- centered. If one aspires to lead through, they need to cut through all the competiton be it in the field of sports, government or any other scetor.
However a slight balance of cooperaion is also needed. Teaching student compassion, humanity and empathy makes him more responsible and most importantly a good human being. In a sports match, both of the qualities are required for the leader. The quality of compassion and motivation for his team and aso at the same time inducing equal amount of competition to stand ahead of the opposite team.
Thus in conclusion, competitive environment helps the child to gain the skills needed for him to stand out successfuly as a leader in the current world with howling competition with an edge of cooperation.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 144, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...rong, skilled and competent personality in future. A child needs to be bold enough to fac...
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Line 3, column 329, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ke the family or society will be to us. Hence it becomes very vital for a child to be...
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Line 7, column 193, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'need'?
Suggestion: need
...a true picture of how much more does he needs to ahcieve. Todays world is not same co...
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Line 7, column 193, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'need'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: need
...a true picture of how much more does he needs to ahcieve. Todays world is not same co...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 267, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...not same compassionate as it used to be in past. It has grown to be more complicated an...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...rts, government or any other scetor. However a slight balance of cooperaion is also ...
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...o stand ahead of the opposite team. Thus in conclusion, competitive environment ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, hence, however, if, so, still, then, thus, as to, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2158.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 476.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53361344538 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60613625704 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523109243697 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7874187159 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8260869565 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6956521739 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.34782608696 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183088081469 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0542004205096 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775775661403 0.0758088955206 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0926044735376 0.150359130593 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037981644559 0.0667264976115 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.1392134831 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 12.1639044944 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 144, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...rong, skilled and competent personality in future. A child needs to be bold enough to fac...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 329, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ke the family or society will be to us. Hence it becomes very vital for a child to be...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 193, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'need'?
Suggestion: need
...a true picture of how much more does he needs to ahcieve. Todays world is not same co...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 193, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'need'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: need
...a true picture of how much more does he needs to ahcieve. Todays world is not same co...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 267, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...not same compassionate as it used to be in past. It has grown to be more complicated an...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...rts, government or any other scetor. However a slight balance of cooperaion is also ...
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...o stand ahead of the opposite team. Thus in conclusion, competitive environment ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, hence, however, if, so, still, then, thus, as to, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2158.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 476.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53361344538 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60613625704 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523109243697 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7874187159 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8260869565 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6956521739 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.34782608696 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183088081469 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0542004205096 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775775661403 0.0758088955206 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0926044735376 0.150359130593 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037981644559 0.0667264976115 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.1392134831 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 12.1639044944 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.