The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Leadership in simple terms refers to how people are governed to achieve a particular objective or common goal. As the author asserts, in order for young people to become better leaders, they need to have a sense of cooperation amongst themselves as oppose to competition between one another. While some may disagree with this statement, arguing that competition breeds efficiency in the sense that each young person will work towards acquiring all it takes to be better equipped as a leader, this may lead to work overload in the long run. What amount of knowledge, skills and experience is one supposed to acquire to be a better leader than the other person? Therefore, it is true that in order for our society to thrive for better, there need to be cooperation amongst its citizens.
Firstly, there is a common notion which says, "No man is an island of himself". This goes to say that not one single man can do it all to achieve success. The government, industry or field is a system of different components, structures, functions, and so on. It is quite impossible for one person to control all these aspects of an organisation let alone a whole government. A good leader whose main aim is to ensure set goals are achieved ensures the synchronization of all these subsystems that makes up a whole, ensuring that while tasks are performed individually, simultaneously, there is a common goal at the end of the day. Hence, cooperation is much needed in this regard.
Secondly, Leadership could also mean getting things done through people. That is for a government to achieve a common goal, it needs different skills coming together, each contributing based on their area of specializatiion. Take for instance, a bank that has different units, the operations team, market facing team, treasury unit, investment unit, and so on. The Managing Director of such an organisation definitely cannot possible have the best of knowledge in each aspect. So he is better equipped to hire the best professionals who can contribute meaningfully. Once a gain, showing how cooperation is more important among to be leaders.
Further more, one other quality of a good leader is the ability to see others succeed which competition does not promote as every young would be leader, instead of helping others succeed will be focused on himself alone. How then can we breed good leaders in the society if we do not train others as well.
In conclusion, the society will benefit more if they instill cooperation and not competition among the young to be leaders since leaders function better when they can coordinate. The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'as opposed to'?
Suggestion: as opposed to
...sense of cooperation amongst themselves as oppose to competition between one another. While ...
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Line 9, column 61, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ociety will benefit more if they instill cooperation and not competition among th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2329.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 468.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9764957265 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91966596983 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523504273504 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 731.7 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.980045837 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.904761905 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 5.21951772744 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360570633879 0.243740707755 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0979174882672 0.0831039109588 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143204810117 0.0758088955206 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211345311044 0.150359130593 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.170785419686 0.0667264976115 256% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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