The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The statement suggests that for optimum utilization of society's resources such as our youth, we need to instill them with a quality of cooperation instead of competition. I would like to agree with this statement and will be providing support for such claims in the following paragraphs.
Firstly, when we talk about the development of a society , we need to keep in mind that society in itself does not mean wellbeing of each individual but rather the entire group as a whole. If we start implementing rules and regulations according to each individual, then the society as a whole fails and we will see a rapid decline in stability. But instead, if we cooperate and then take decisions, which leads to stability in society as a whole, then there is a higher rate of success. As the famous quote goes 'In unity we stand and divided we fall'. If young individuals start competing instead of cooperating, then regular negative trysts would lead to chaos and destruction instead of order and development.
Additionally, I would like to bring to light the fact that the young generation is the future of the nation. Every step they take towards their futures, is a step towards the future of the nation. So we need to make sure that instilling their minds with the correct formula for success because that is our best bet for the development of a great nation. By cooperating, we teach them that taking in every opinion and perspective and then taking decisions accordingly, creates rooms for innovation and better reforms that will burgeon our upcoming generations for decades. For instance, a person who takes in opinions of their peers is more likely to be respected and valued than a person who just wishes to beat his peers and come out first. No one wants to listen to this person. So the recipe for development is definitely joining hands and going forward.
Parallelly, the proponents of this argument would mention that competition between peers motivates everyone to do their best. I would like to agree with this statement but only till a certain extent. Competition does bring out the best in people and is surely a motivating factor. But if there has to be any kind of competition, it has to be with our own selves; to be better than we were the last time. To beat our own limits and come out the best versions of ourselves. Each individual is born with different capabilities and pitting them against each other and thinking that would benefit the nation is disaster in process and would be a erroneous decision to take.
In essence, I would just like to say that taking decisions regarding the youth of the country has to be thoroughly thought of and every aspect of such decisions should be looked properly. Significant decisions like these could make or break a country and then we would have no one to blame. So we should be very careful and discuss these things with cooperation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...to find answers to a few questions that Im going to ask below. Firstly, the di...
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Line 5, column 376, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...th which the positive reviews increased so as to get a better idea of the situation. ...
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Line 9, column 252, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[4]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'proper knowledge'.
Suggestion: proper knowledge
...s good in comparison to others. Without a proper knowledge on marking scheme, it is difficult to r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, likewise, look, may, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, for instance, in fact, kind of, such as, as well as, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2171.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 449.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83518930958 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64883077652 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489977728285 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.4697421534 60.3974514979 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 103.380952381 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.380952381 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.95238095238 5.21951772744 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0601087244509 0.243740707755 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0184415955198 0.0831039109588 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0204142349532 0.0758088955206 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0300926823733 0.150359130593 20% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00847135074899 0.0667264976115 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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