High Schools should eliminate their art and music programs to make room for more extensive studies in Mathematics and English. Tests scores in Mathematics and English are of paramount interest to the colleges most students wish to attend, while art and music classes are mere electives of little use to students who do not intend to pursue careers in such creative fields.
Write a response that expresses the degree to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason or reasons that underlie the claim.
Although subjects like Mathematics and English are of high importance to colleges, eliminating other less extensive subjects like Art and Music would prove to be a huge loss to the overall development of a student.
First, high schools are like experimental labs for students who haven’t yet discovered what field they want to go ahead with. Just because colleges require good scores in Mathematics and English does not necessarily signify that every student would like to pursue a future with those subjects. High schools are a place where a student discovers his/her talents and then act on them. If a student is interested in painting and attends said high school where such programs are given no importance, he/she may never be able to discover her talent in that field. Which in turn would be a huge loss to the student as well as the society by depriving it of such accomplishments. Picasso and Beethoven would have never been able to pursue their interests had they been made to study English and Mathematics instead and we would have deprived the world of such talents.
Second, students who do want to pursue a career in English or Mathematics may feel like they are wasting unnecessary time in art and music classes. But the catch here is even the brightest of students need some recreational time. Discovering creative fields like art and music may be refreshing to such students and give them a distraction from extensive studying. They might even gain familiarity in said fields thus increasing broadening their scope of knowledge. This contributes to overall development of a student.
Lastly, colleges are a place where students specialize in the topics/areas they want to gain expertise and pursue a career in. Colleges narrows down the unnecessary subjects that aren’t necessarily required by a student to follow their interests. If high schools start doing the same, there would be very little difference in high schools and colleges. There needs to be a distinction between both for congruence in society.
In conclusion, high schools should focus on overall development of child and not just follow whichever paths colleges walk on. Every subject is equally important and depriving students of them would be a huge loss to the student as well as the society.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, lastly, may, second, so, then, thus, well, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1915.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 378.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06613756614 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79676679077 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.351426918 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.388888889 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284456770225 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0878436349855 0.0831039109588 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545527254496 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165413525172 0.150359130593 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456529600043 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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