The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition
Contemporary landscapes of various fields of inquiries emphasize the inevitable quality of surviving through competition. We are more and more being exposed to contents of mass media in which pedants of each field are evaluating the competitiveness of a candidate who is willing to be an expert and underscore the input of presenting oneself as the most capable prodigy among others. Nevertheless, the factors of competition cannot be superior to the ethics of cooperation, as we are living in a society in which communicational and networking skills are becoming as crucial as independent qualities. This essay will demonstrate the importance of cooperation in most fields, which shall be a full agreement of the given statement.
The conventional thought of those who put emphasis on the driving force of self-improvement is that competitions is required in every field for an atmosphere. Several laboratory researches on both animals and human beings show how individuals show their eagerness in acquiring certain objects when a competitor is apparent. Even though the superficial accomplishment is the same, the more number of competitors exists, the more intense the satisfaction becomes. Thus, it is acknowledgeable that some may argue that competition is a propelling force for better productivity in most fields. Especially, when it comes to the ethics of leadership, people may think that young people may do their best in developing their skills when there is harsh competition.
However, in terms of looking at a long-term result, cooperation cannot be undermined. Competition does not only harm the importance of the process itself, but is also an obstacle of being creative in implementing the various steps required for the desired ability of a leader. Even though the atmosphere of competition may arouse an instinct for survival, this may not last long as an efficient tool for bringing the people on their optimal conditions. Rather, it becomes more important that the individual finds and discovers essential factors that attract their interest. This kind of interest only becomes apparent when there is no competitor, and when the individual can sit down with a placid mind, grabs the gist of the given field, and starts to dig into the very fundamental mechanism of the field. Once an environment is beset as a cooperative field in which people around are invigorative and encouraging one another, the individual may focus on the very process of the field and find their own talent in becoming a specialty.
Furthermore, cooperation requires more important tenets than competition such as trust and responsiblity, which are crucial factors of developing industries, a government or any other fields. For instance, we observe the tendency of huge corporates that do not urge employees to get better than their colleagues. We are informed that they have their own special realm and they may be able to focus on their own roles. Only with cooperation can people gather as one team and develop a single project into a
The conclusion now stands that cooperation cannot be neglected at all even though in the surface competition shall be more efficient. The fact is that people may grow as a team and develop their field into a sustainable and long term world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, look, may, nevertheless, so, thus, for instance, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.3162921348 194% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2751.0 2235.4752809 123% => OK
No of words: 529.0 442.535393258 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20037807183 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79583152331 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10918056131 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497164461248 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 864.9 704.065955056 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2065798446 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.55 118.986275619 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.45 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9 5.21951772744 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19694019266 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060166870492 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0432155876737 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112144278834 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0311324720315 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 100.480337079 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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