The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position
Leadership is not an easy task and it takes some courage and discipline to be a leader. A leader is someone who manages the people and resources of a particular place or system. The prompt suggests that the best way for a society is to prepare its young people for leadership by instilling in them a sense of cooperation and not competition. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this claim and argue that young people should be prepared for leadership by instilling a sense of cooperation and not competition for the following two reasons. However, there are situations where competition is necessary.
First of all, instilling cooperation in young people will help in developing the skill of teamwork. The role of teamwork and cooperation in any society cannot be overemphasized. Two heads they say is better than none. When a group of people come together with the aim of achieving a goal, it helps in the quick realization of that goal and other benefits such as friendship can be developed in the process. For instance, when a young person is prepared for leadership by instilling cooperation, the person when leading a project or making any decision would love everyone to be involved in the decision making process and can help the person identify some areas he or she would not have thought of on their own.
Second, instilling competition on the young people would have a negative effect on that society as each person would have different goals for the society which may not be sustainable. Also, the young people brought up in this way may take every process as a do or die affair. That is when a situation does not favour them, they will decide to bring the other person down through several bad means. For instance, a competitive young person leading a project in an industry would try to shut everyone out and receive all the praise for the success of the project even though he is not the most skilled member in the project group. Competition would result in great division among members of the society
Of course, some may argue that young people should be instilled with a sense of competition in preparing them for leadership as this will make everyone to be at their best. While this is true, it will have a negative effect in the long run as projects or situations that require people come together would be greatly affected. Hence a society that instills competiton in its young for leadership does so at its own peril.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, second, so, as to, for instance, of course, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1970.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 379.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19788918206 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00798500128 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 215.323595506 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.422163588391 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 601.2 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.6317908544 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.95 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.21951772744 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0469699240045 0.243740707755 19% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0176786114111 0.0831039109588 21% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0307841583013 0.0758088955206 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0335884906878 0.150359130593 22% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0134901824912 0.0667264976115 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 100.480337079 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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