Claim: Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system.
Reason: Laws cannot change what is in people's hearts or minds.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Laws and legal system make up the judiciary arm of society. The claim suggests that many problems of the modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with the claim and especially the stated reason, and provide another reason as to why I disagree. However, I do concede that there are outliers.
Laws can change what is in the people’s heart or minds as they are strict guidelines for people to follow and laid down punishment for people who go against the law. For instance, if a person has the motive or aim of stealing, the laws governing that particular area may discourage him from engaging in such act. Also, if there is a law that states that if one is caught cheating in exams, the person would automatically fail the exam. This law may discourage a person planning on going to cheat in the exam and the person may rather prepare well for the exam.
Many of the problems of the world today are happening because there are lack of laws that are meant to keep the people at check. If there are laws for each and every act, the problems in the modern society may be resolved. For instance, when the law of equal pay for workers was established, it helped reduce the segregation between whites and black and also between men and women, which has helped in solving a societal problem.
However, there are instances where the legal system may not be sincere and the laid down laws can be easily avoided without any consequence and hence hinder the progress of the society. However, if the legal system is a sincere one, this may not hold water.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 479, Rule ID: ON_GOING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'ongoing'?
Suggestion: ongoing
...is law may discourage a person planning on going to cheat in the exam and the person may...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, may, so, well, as to, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 33.0505617978 45% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 58.6224719101 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1323.0 2235.4752809 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 289.0 442.535393258 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57785467128 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35294117647 2.79657885939 84% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 215.323595506 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 415.8 704.065955056 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7492522654 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.769230769 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2307692308 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76923076923 5.21951772744 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341661803975 0.243740707755 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124199623472 0.0831039109588 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11563540351 0.0758088955206 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206030064586 0.150359130593 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119314362899 0.0667264976115 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 12.1639044944 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 100.480337079 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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