The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

Leadership is not an easy task and it takes some courage and discipline to be a leader. A leader is someone who manages the people and resources of a particular place or system. The prompt suggests that the best way for a society is to prepare its young people for leadership by instilling in them a sense of cooperation and not competition. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this claim and argue that young people should be prepared for leadership by instilling a sense of cooperation and not competition for the following two reasons. However, there are situations where competition is necessary.

First of all, instilling cooperation in young people will help in developing the skill of teamwork. The role of teamwork and cooperation in any society cannot be overemphasized. Two heads they say is better than none. When a group of people come together with the aim of achieving a goal, it helps in the quick realization of that goal and other benefits such as friendship can be developed in the process. For instance, when a young person is prepared for leadership by instilling cooperation, the person when leading a project or making any decision would love everyone to be involved in the decision making process and can help the person identify some areas he or she would not have thought of on their own.

Second, instilling competition on the young people would have a negative effect on that society as each person would have different goals for the society which may not be sustainable. Also, the young people brought up in this way may take every process as a do or die affair. That is when a situation does not favour them, they will decide to bring the other person down through several bad means. For instance, a competitive young person leading a project in an industry would try to shut everyone out and receive all the praise for the success of the project even though he is not the most skilled member in the project group. Competition would result in great division among members of the society

Of course, some may argue that young people should be instilled with a sense of competition in preparing them for leadership as this will make everyone to be at their best. While this is true, it will have a negative effect in the long run as projects or situations that require people come together would be greatly affected. Hence a society that instills competiton in its young for leadership does so at its own peril.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 257, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ome together would be greatly affected. Hence a society that instills competiton in i...

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, still, while, for instance, of course, such as, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2023.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 426.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74882629108 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68702246154 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450704225352 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 629.1 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.4621394183 60.3974514979 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.0 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0588235294 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35294117647 5.21951772744 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.468154824792 0.243740707755 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160997123241 0.0831039109588 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.165600625367 0.0758088955206 218% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.326509621831 0.150359130593 217% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122634736173 0.0667264976115 184% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 100.480337079 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.

Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.