The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Childrens are the future of a country and should be prepared for it with care and comfort. The prompt recommends, the best way for a society to prepare its young people for various roles is by instilling them a sense of cooperation, not competition. In my opinion, i agree with the prompt. By cooperation we can accomplish much more than by competition.
At first, it may seem that competition is the best way to find the best talent. However, a country cannot be run by a single person who came first in a competition. It requires a combined effort of individuals with different story, experience and talent. For instance, in a south asian country named india, a fierce competition is among the students who are all competiting against each other for getting into IIT's or NIT's. After several years of competition when they reach there goal of IIT, they are not sure what to do next. On the other hand, students of Finland are encouraged to act as team and eases any competition between them. As a result, they are the best education system in the world.
In addition, when children are cooperating in a certain task, it gives them a sense of contribution. A survey conducted among the high school students of Ryan International School Delhi showed that eighty percent of the student who engage in a group activity or some thing which requires to cooperate with each other are more likely to be effective in work than people who don't engage in such activities. It shows that while competition will give you a winner among some people, cooperation will give a larger group of people who all are effective in what they do.
Furthermore, it is also the case that when a children try to cooperate with others, they will be at ease while working in an unknown environment with unknown people. A research study conducted by indian institute of science banglore found, students with more group activity are more socialable and comfortable with unknown people as compared to who did not took part in a group activity or a project. It shows that cooperation can sometimes be beneficial for improving social life of a student.
In conclusion, it may be possible that for some students competition yields a good result but for the majority it does not. Thus, it is better to have students to be in a cooperative environment rather than a competitive one, as the pros of cooperation outweigh benefits of competition.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, thus, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1992.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 417.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77697841727 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83289057209 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498800959233 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.9939340723 60.3974514979 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.666666667 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1666666667 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.88888888889 5.21951772744 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297032814851 0.243740707755 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0981633590635 0.0831039109588 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115278441154 0.0758088955206 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179069451035 0.150359130593 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106805013927 0.0667264976115 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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