Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Some people believe young adults should prefer to live with their families for a longer time. However, i do not agree with this statement. In my opinion, young adults
should try to live away from their parents as soon as possible. I support my statement for two reasons.
Firstly, living with parents for a longer period of time causes more financial strain on the family. From the day a child is born, the financial expenses accompanied
with child's growth and development increases day by day. When that child reaches adulthood, financial burden related to that child increases significantly. There is
an upper limit up to which parents can tolerate these expenses. After this limit it becomes really hard for both the parents and their son or daughter. For example, I
remember when i was about to join my graduate school four years ago, the expenses related to my education skyrocketed so, my parents were not able to pay for my
expenses. Thus, financial burden is one of the main reasons why young adults should try to gain their financial independence as soon as possible.
Secondly, parents will not be there for one's whole life, a person needs to have shrewdness while dealing with the harsh reality of the world around them. As a person
grows, number of important decision to be made increases significantly in life. One should have a sense of what to expect and how to deal with it. There is no other
way to gain such sense than experience them. If a person has been in a family there whole life, chances are they do not have that experience. For instance, when i
newly joined the microsoft corporation one year ago, i didn't had any knowledge or experience about how to handle the daily expenses effectively. However, after
several months i got that experience and now i know how to deal with these kind of things.
In conclusion, in some cases it may be necessary to live with the parents. Take, when the parents do not have good health condition then it is necessary to be with
them. However, these cases happen rarely and for the majority of cases living away from the parents is a better option to consider.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ir families for a longer time. However, i do not agree with this statement. In my...
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...rstly, living with parents for a longer period of time causes more financial strain on the fam...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...daughter. For example, I remember when i was about to join my graduate school fo...
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...Secondly, parents will not be there for ones whole life, a person needs to have shre...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...e microsoft corporation one year ago, i didnt had any knowledge or experience about h...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ctively. However, after several months i got that experience and now i know how ...
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Line 14, column 46, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...al months i got that experience and now i know how to deal with these kind of thi...
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Line 14, column 70, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...erience and now i know how to deal with these kind of things. In conclusion, in some c...
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Message: The adverb 'rarely' is usually put before the verb 'happen'.
Suggestion: rarely happen
... to be with them. However, these cases happen rarely and for the majority of cases living aw...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1778.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76675603217 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5290526309 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512064343164 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.6971425605 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.6666666667 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7619047619 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.71428571429 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 14.0 4.53405017921 309% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320829433096 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0964622019379 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104779755796 0.0737576698707 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111701201556 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110184037796 0.0645574589148 171% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.