The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones.
technology helps in solving many problems which humans face. The ability of humans to think for themselves will not deteriorate if people start relying more on technology to solve their problems because technology will provide ample amount of time which humans can spend on solving other problems which cannot be resolved by the current technologies.
Firstly, when people start relying more and more on technology, then it provides numerous advantages for humans and helps in making human intellect more powerful. For example, it takes more time and involves manual energy to wash the clothes with hands but using washing machine it takes less time and does not involve lot of manual work. In the same way many household products have been made by using technology which involves less amount of manual work and less amount of time. humans can use their plenty amount of free time to do their jobs and activities like walking, physical exercise, yoga, binge watching. humans can focus on their jobs without worrying about doing the household routine which used to take a lot of time in the past. humans will now try to solve the problems which even advanced technologies cannot resolve. They will use their free time to create new technologies to make our lives even more easier. this way the thinking ability of humans will become more powerful than before.
However, humans do not use their brain for small things and rely on technology for these things. For example, calculating total amount for the items bought in the grocery store or remembering their friend's phone number or remembering address of their favorite place. but humans can make use of technology for doing these things and focus more on their important concerns like developing a new technology for making their daily tasks easier.
More reliance on technology helps in solving many problems and provides ample amount of time which can be focused on solving important human problems which currently available technologies cannot resolve. this way the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely improve as people will now try to solve the complex problems which cannot be solved by current technologies.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Technology
technology helps in solving many problems which hu...
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Suggestion: Humans
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Suggestion: Humans
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Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
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Suggestion: But
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Suggestion: This
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, so, then, for example, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 19.5258426966 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 12.9106741573 8% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1833.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 359.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10584958217 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43587222865 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 215.323595506 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.440111420613 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 574.2 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6093828108 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.2 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9333333333 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0142756400796 0.243740707755 6% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00825690182804 0.0831039109588 10% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0169713735422 0.0758088955206 22% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0095405616358 0.150359130593 6% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00954075754206 0.0667264976115 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 100.480337079 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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