The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position
True success is only achieved when one accepts and overcomes their failures. Success is not primarily materialistic, it is a state of mind resistant to any negativity that may cause it to crumble. Ingraining such a principal must start at a young age itself. One of the most brilliant scientists to ever exist, Albert Einstein- was far from perfect. He failed an uncountable number of times, but every fibre of his existence did not give up. His journey to greatness was bolstered by the support of his mentor, Dr. Max Talmey. Talmey was present with him during his successes and around 99 failures, it’s a story of poignancy. He chose not to ignore his shortcomings, rather to address them and make him a better individual. This ultimately led to stardom in the field of science for Einstein, his most appreciated theory being that light can behave as a particle as well and not only as a wave. This revolutionised the field of theoretical physics. Not only did he become an extraordinary scientist with multiple accolades to his name, but he also learnt important life lessons and teachings from his mentor which made him a wise person. This marks the importance of an impactful teacher.
Every individual is flawed. As children we lack the maturity to distinguish between right and wrong and more importantly, children’s negative actions are hardly pointed out based on the assumption that they will learn to correct themselves in the future. Though individuality and self-improvement are cardinal life skills, realising our shortcomings at a young age will definitely go a long way. For example, in many schools in India, from the sixth grade itself, there is neck to neck competition when it comes to academics. The students that perform well are appreciated, given scholarships. But similar treatment is not given to the students that fail. They are discriminated by other students itself and made to attend remedial classes and such. Though actions need to be taken to address the problem regarding average and below average performance of certain students, the teachers should help these students solve any dilemmas, such that they are not repeated in the future. Constructive criticism is a pillar of education. An intelligent student can be haughty and insolent. It is the teacher’s responsibility to correct such behaviour.
When it comes to family, values are inculcated from childhood. It is the parents’ responsibility to boost the morale of their children so that they have the confidence to achieve great things but at the same time address their negative qualities so that they don’t end up hurting others or in vulnerable positions. As one moves through their journey in life, they carry these morals with them. But it is unlikely that they will be perfect individuals even then. For example, an employer should encourage good work and results but at the same time correct any wrongdoings or decisions to help them arrive at the right results. This boosts the employee’s chance of success in general.
In conclusion, the crux of an individual’s personality bears fruit consisting of learnings from corrected negative actions along with positive actions and values.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, regarding, so, then, well, for example, in conclusion, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 33.0505617978 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2679.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 523.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1223709369 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95343201342 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 291.0 215.323595506 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556405353728 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 822.6 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.2370786517 148% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.5593448214 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.3 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4333333333 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.83333333333 5.21951772744 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0845460682323 0.243740707755 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0180763379555 0.0831039109588 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0254373197534 0.0758088955206 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0626207283746 0.150359130593 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356452214572 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 144.0 100.480337079 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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