Can or should we avoid mobile phones getting most critical technology in our lives?
According to me one should embrace the growth in any field. So, yes one should not hinder in the growth of mobile telephone to become the most critical technological invention of our lives. Many people wholly depend on these devices for their daily work. These devices are no more a luxury but instead are a necessecity.
There are many reasons to support this argument as firstly, they reduce the communication gap between people. Nowadays barely any person is disconnected from the internet. Studies show that more then 69% of the world population is connected to the internet through mobile phones. The connectivity was supplied earlier by landlines but by the invention of mobile one can be connected all the time as the are not restrained by wired connections.
Secondly, one can have various features of different gadgets in one piece. Like if you have a mobile then you do not need to carry a calculator, torch,watch etc with it. Mobiles include all the features listed above. The processor power in some phones is tantamount to nowadays computers. Third and last thing is that there is limitless progress possible in the area. The more features or uses the device gives us the more it's value increases in our day to day lives.
But as every boon brings a bane, the mobiles also have some drawbacks. The mere presence of it is taking people away from each other. People have started to interact more virtually than they do in person. This contradicts the primary benefit provided by the mobiles. Also with great power comes greater risks. The security of a persons privacy is in danger. As these phones come with cameras, these little device can prove to be dangerous as remotely accessing these device is quite easy.
As stated earlier, these little devices are vastly used, their demise n our lives should be slow and glib. Many people would be affected by even a small decision taken to damp the boom of mobile phones. One possible way is to increase prices of mobile phone little by little, or to introduce people to a new and advanced technology which removes the disadvantages of the former. When a child is introduced to a new toy, the child forgets the old ones. Same is for the mobiles and people. But what is puerile in this world. Though mobiles bring same risks with them, they are the most important piece of technology that humans carry largely with them. Whatever makes life easy should be accepted wholly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
According to me one should embrace the growth in any fi...
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Line 3, column 196, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[2]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...om the internet. Studies show that more then 69% of the world population is connecte...
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Line 3, column 400, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...le one can be connected all the time as the are not restrained by wired connections. ...
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Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , watch
...do not need to carry a calculator, torch,watch etc with it. Mobiles include all the fe...
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Line 7, column 268, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...rimary benefit provided by the mobiles. Also with great power comes greater risks. T...
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Line 7, column 329, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
... comes greater risks. The security of a persons privacy is in danger. As these phones c...
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Line 7, column 462, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this device' or 'these devices'?
Suggestion: this device; these devices
...e to be dangerous as remotely accessing these device is quite easy. As stated earlier, t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, third
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2021.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 420.0 442.535393258 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8119047619 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4954777693 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545238095238 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.6597075752 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 69.6896551724 118.986275619 59% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 14.4827586207 23.4991977007 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.20689655172 5.21951772744 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.83258426966 290% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219081423358 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0461825443055 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05974886523 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115276477937 0.150359130593 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592007544946 0.0667264976115 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 14.1392134831 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 48.8420337079 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 12.1743820225 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.