Claim: In any field — business, politics, education, government — those in power should step down after five years.
Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.
In the given issue, the author has highlighted an important aspect for today's world, where he states that placing new leadership in every field after five years will lead to success and development in the field. I would like to take conditional stand for author's claim, since for certain fields, more the experience, the better is the leader. And sometimes, five years are more than enough to make all the changes required.
To begin with, let's say in the field of business and politics, one may take a major chunk of his lifetime to reach his desired goal. And people like these, who are passionately dedicated to a dream are the best people to perform leadership. They ensure that whatever they are leading, may it be a state or nation or a company, it must reach to it's top most position. We have know great leader like Steve Jobs, Bill Gates, Narendra Modi etc. Steve Jobs has dedicated a major chunk of his lifetime to establish Apple and take it to a world-class level. He is very famous for his leadership skills and his vision that made it possible. Bill Gates is also dedicated to Microsoft since his early 20s and made it a company which has such a reputation all over the world and was the richest person on the planet for ten years in arow. Narendra Modi was dedicated to the nation from a early age. After a struggle and hardwork of many years, he is now the Prime Minister of India and is continuously working toward the development of the country. So, as we can see by above examples, these people devoted their lifetime for a dream and hence are the only capable leader who can accomplish it with such a zeal. No doubt, later on Apple and Microsoft appointed new CEOs, but it was far later after the companies were running very smoothly and were very established, definitely not after five years.
Now, if we take into consideration the field of Education, here I may say it is important to change leaders in a span of five years. Since, there are so many technological advances every year, and sometimes people from older syllabus or technology, find it difficult to get a hang of the latest developments, this lack of knowledge can fog their decisions or sometimes prevent them from taking better decisions possible.Due to so many verticals of knowledge available nowadays to opt for, every field of study is developing and thriving in its own way. Therefore, a vision of someone who has knowledge of the field and knows latest developments as well, is the one who is perfect to become a leader for the education field. They will know what the current youth wants to thrive in their respective careers and how this goal could be achieved.
Therefore, partially agreeing with the author's claim to change the leadership, I think politics and business requires great level of experience, but education can be given in the new hands for the betterment of the upcoming youth.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 214, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... success and development in the field. I would like to take conditional stand for...
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Line 2, column 375, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'known'.
Suggestion: known
...reach to its top most position. We have know great leader like Steve Jobs, Bill Gate...
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Line 2, column 875, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...a Modi was dedicated to the nation from a early age. After a struggle and hardwor...
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Line 3, column 420, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Due
...m from taking better decisions possible.Due to so many verticals of knowledge avail...
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Line 3, column 619, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'knows the latest'.
Suggestion: knows the latest
...eone who has knowledge of the field and knows latest developments as well, is the one who is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, therefore, well, i think, no doubt, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2385.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 509.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68565815324 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60215646487 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 215.323595506 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506876227898 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 762.3 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.2374749917 60.3974514979 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.526315789 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7894736842 23.4991977007 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21052631579 5.21951772744 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167092312511 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.050098368074 0.0831039109588 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512295554679 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12594156363 0.150359130593 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516552529447 0.0667264976115 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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