Claim: In any situation, the best way to persuade other people is to present them with facts
and statistics rather than with emotional arguments.
Reason: Facts are objective, so they are more persuasive than subjective appeals.
Even if you have a family member, a friend, or a loved one who you share many similarities with, you will inevitably find yourself at a crossroads with that person at least once in your lifetime. People's minds work differently, and in order to persuade others to agree with what you are in support of, the most effective tactic of persuasion needs to be utilized. When faced with this type of situation, some people say that the best way is to present facts and statistics, whereas others opt for targeting others' emotions. Each side does make a cogent case, but I believe that presenting facts and statistics are more powerful in all situations.
Admittedly, because humans are emotional beings as well as intellectual beings, strong emotions can overpower even the most concrete evidence. With just the right amount of emotional influence, people can elicit what they desire from other people. Take, for example, getting on an overbooked plane. Usually, elderly people and families with young children are on the priority list when boarding. This means that healthy adults, usually men, are asked to take the next flight. For the men, telling the flight attendants that they arrived at the gate before anybody else, or that they have the least amount of luggage will not help their case. However, if they appeal to those in charge that they are returning home from months of separation from their families or that they have a terminally ill family member waiting for them whose condition has worsened, it is highly likely that exceptions will be made for them. A compelling dramatic story engages other people to feel sympathy, making the situation much easier for them to be persuaded.
However, manipulating people's feelings should be done with caution, and often people have to explain their behaviors to other people who find the decision irrational. On the other hand, presenting facts and statistics is much more efficient because they are undeniable. It is difficult to refute objective data because they don't need to be explained; people look at them and instantly understand the costs and benefits that would follow. Take, for example, a meeting at a company to launch a new product. Before the project begins, each department will do their due diligence to find out the costs that would be incurred and how much revenue the product is expected to bring in. If the costs outweigh prospective profits, the project will be dropped. If, in any case, the project manager decides to disregard the facts and push forward with the project, then he or she will most likely have to answer to the shareholders, because this type of action does not make intuitive sense. On the contrary, if the project is cancelled based on the evident analysis, the shareholders will understand it was the optimal decision, even if many of them had been expecting the project to start.
In conclusion, although emotional arguments can be persuasive at times, they don't stand as firm a ground as showing objective data. Using emotions to persuade someone means going over the apparent optimal decision, which means that later on the person who is persuaded will have to answer to others' disagreements. Also, objective data are in of themselves objective, and cannot be refuted, which allows people to persuade others with ease, and there is no room for debate later on. Therefore, utilizing objective facts is the mest method to persuade other people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, then, therefore, well, whereas, at least, for example, in conclusion, as well as, in any case, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2871.0 2235.4752809 128% => OK
No of words: 574.0 442.535393258 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00174216028 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89472135074 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58607541659 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 297.0 215.323595506 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517421602787 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 899.1 704.065955056 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.10617977528 322% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7040339629 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.625 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9166666667 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.79166666667 5.21951772744 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263926309466 0.243740707755 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0779523479284 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0622672143628 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172972252112 0.150359130593 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442845687914 0.0667264976115 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 100.480337079 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.