A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The education system is always a contentious topic of debate for a nation because it has the greatest influence to young children. Due to its tremendous impact on people's lives, some people argue that the nation should be in charge in enforcing the same national curriculum to all students. Although this claim does seem legitimate at the outset, I believe that the curriculum students study should vary.
Admittedly, teaching the same national curriculum does benefit students because it allows them to retain an equal degree of knowledge. The reason this is important is because the society as a whole has a tacit baseline of the level of common knowledge a person should have. For example, historical milestones such as the founding of the United States of America or the Cuban Missile Crisis are deemed as facts that everyone should be knowledgable about. People do not usually ask whether other people know what these events are; it is a given that all people have learned about them in school. Therefore, in order for a person to feel equally competent to others, it would seem prudent to institute the same national curriculum.
However, the aforementioned idea fails to look at the bigger picture. Requiring the same curriculum for all types of students varying in physicial and mental capabilities can rather deter the development of their abilities. To try to achieve equality, the system would be forgoing individualism, which is a tremendous impediment in allowing children to reach their full potential. For example, even if certain children show artistic talents at a young age, they would not be able to work on improving these skills if forced to take the same classes as other peers. The students would not only miss out on the chance to become formidable artists, but the nation would also be losing its chance of engendering influential public figures.
Another point to be cautious about regarding the same national curriculum is that, without careful observation on the materials, the system could be abused to propagate political agendas. There have been many cases in history where students of colonies were given education making them feel more favorable to the countries that reigned over them. In South Korea, under the Japanese Colonial Period in the early 1900s, the Japanese instigated a pro-Japanese atmosphere by forcing children to praise the Japanese emperor. Even today, some adults still retain some parts of the knowledge taught then and maintain the misguided notion that Japan was an ally instead of an enemy back then. As illustrated in this example, education has a long-lasting subconscious effect on people's lives, and if the nation was solely in charge of drawing up class material, it is likely to become biased, and this bias could last for a long period in people.
In conclusion, even though enforcing the same national curriculum could seem advantageous at first glance, when contemplated on in depth, you can see that it is not a wise approach in education. Enforcing the same education could deter students from developing their abilities and developing their perspectives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, regarding, so, still, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2626.0 2235.4752809 117% => OK
No of words: 510.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14901960784 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75287414029 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 215.323595506 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537254901961 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 835.2 704.065955056 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5184884682 60.3974514979 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.3 118.986275619 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55 5.21951772744 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222733250238 0.243740707755 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065276274371 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499980238599 0.0758088955206 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130240587432 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497111215281 0.0667264976115 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 100.480337079 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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