Claim: The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.
Reason: Heroes and role models reveal a society's highest ideals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
I strongly disagree with the claim statement and reason behind the assertion. Because in our society there are different types of citizens and we can not understand the character of the society by examining only the heroes or role models. There are many contributions of other people who are not role model or hero of these generations.
Firstly, general persons are majority of any country. Among them only few people become role model and people follow them as they are heroes. However, the number of heroes people are limited in our society. So, we can not make decisions to see people follow their heroes or role model. For example in Palan village there are 1 million people follow their role model district chairman honest person . But people are very dishonest and do crime in the village. So we can not ensure the character of the village by knowing the role model of that village .
Secondly, if we examine the society by not only examining the role models but also analizing the generals people of the any country, then we can get appropriate observations about the society and we can learn how these this society treats other people and the values and norms of there majority people which is the correct measurements to decide the character of the society. For instance, when a foreigner come to visit any country, they started making friendship with general people to understand the society character rather than people who choose his or her role model.
Thirdly, speaker also gave a reason that heroes and models reveal society highest ideals . however, there are other hidden ideal person in the world whom are not in front of camera . Their contributions are also great their work has great impact for our society. For example, young teenage follow the role model of actor actress but they don’t have that much contributions for our country compare to general people of any honest teacher who teach poor students with free education. But, these teacher are role model and they are the real ideal of any country.
In sum, we can say that by learning the societies other general people we can know about the character of the society and also we can not make decisions by examining the people choosing the heroes or role model because are limited example of our country. Moreover, all role model is not ideal person and there many person whom are honest and ideal but they are not followed by people.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 124, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ome role model and people follow them as they are heroes. However, the number of ...
^^
Line 2, column 398, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...le model district chairman honest person . But people are very dishonest and do cr...
^^
Line 2, column 551, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...y knowing the role model of that village . Secondly, if we examine the society by...
^^
Line 4, column 67, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'society the highest'.
Suggestion: society the highest
... a reason that heroes and models reveal society highest ideals . however, there are other hidde...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 89, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...and models reveal society highest ideals . however, there are other hidden ideal p...
^^
Line 4, column 92, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
... models reveal society highest ideals . however, there are other hidden ideal person in...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 130, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'people', 'persons'?
Suggestion: people; persons
.... however, there are other hidden ideal person in the world whom are not in front of c...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 181, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...he world whom are not in front of camera . Their contributions are also great thei...
^^
Line 4, column 355, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... actor actress but they don’t have that much contributions for our country compare t...
^^^^
Line 4, column 488, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this teacher' or 'these teachers'?
Suggestion: this teacher; these teachers
...poor students with free education. But, these teacher are role model and they are the real id...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 311, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun person seems to be countable; consider using: 'many people', 'many persons'.
Suggestion: many people; many persons
...ole model is not ideal person and there many person whom are honest and ideal but they are ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2004.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 415.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82891566265 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35291937232 2.79657885939 84% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.409638554217 0.4932671777 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 655.2 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.3292394063 60.3974514979 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.473684211 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8421052632 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26315789474 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335157973613 0.243740707755 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126804113075 0.0831039109588 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100490449539 0.0758088955206 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246146132194 0.150359130593 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0697904316428 0.0667264976115 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 100.480337079 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 124, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ome role model and people follow them as they are heroes. However, the number of ...
^^
Line 2, column 398, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...le model district chairman honest person . But people are very dishonest and do cr...
^^
Line 2, column 551, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...y knowing the role model of that village . Secondly, if we examine the society by...
^^
Line 4, column 67, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'society the highest'.
Suggestion: society the highest
... a reason that heroes and models reveal society highest ideals . however, there are other hidde...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 89, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...and models reveal society highest ideals . however, there are other hidden ideal p...
^^
Line 4, column 92, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
... models reveal society highest ideals . however, there are other hidden ideal person in...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 130, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'people', 'persons'?
Suggestion: people; persons
.... however, there are other hidden ideal person in the world whom are not in front of c...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 181, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...he world whom are not in front of camera . Their contributions are also great thei...
^^
Line 4, column 355, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... actor actress but they don’t have that much contributions for our country compare t...
^^^^
Line 4, column 488, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this teacher' or 'these teachers'?
Suggestion: this teacher; these teachers
...poor students with free education. But, these teacher are role model and they are the real id...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 311, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun person seems to be countable; consider using: 'many people', 'many persons'.
Suggestion: many people; many persons
...ole model is not ideal person and there many person whom are honest and ideal but they are ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2004.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 415.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82891566265 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35291937232 2.79657885939 84% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.409638554217 0.4932671777 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 655.2 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.3292394063 60.3974514979 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.473684211 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8421052632 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26315789474 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335157973613 0.243740707755 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126804113075 0.0831039109588 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100490449539 0.0758088955206 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246146132194 0.150359130593 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0697904316428 0.0667264976115 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 100.480337079 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.