Claim: The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.
Reason: Heroes and role models reveal a society's highest ideals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
The understanding of a society character as regards the type of people it chooses as role models is a complex one. In fact, it is not a very delicate and controversial topic. The prompt recommends that the character of role models are an embodiment of true character of the society. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this suggestion and argue that role models are in fact a reflection of the ideals of a society for three reasons.
To begin, the values of a society affect the choices the people make. Thus, the choice of the society heroes and role models is a product of the value system the society hold in high regard.for instance, A society that values education will most likely make educated people its role model and hero. On the flip side, society where there is no regard for education would care less about the education of its role model and heroes. Consequently, these heroes and role models become the face of the society and show forth the values which the society upholds. A child who has the aspiration of becoming the president of his or her country will do so on the foundation of the societal values. If he or she doesn't conform to the values of the society, the society will reject such a person to become the number one citizen of the society.
Further, the character of men and women are their trueselves. The collective character of a society represent the character of individual persons which make up the society. A society is a group of people bonded by the same values and ideals. A society will always want their reflection to be seen in their role models, leaders and heros. For example, a black society will appreciate a person who fights for the cause of racism because it is a commonality to the balck community. An Igbo man from the Eastern part of Nigeria will appreciate and endorse someone who is business-oriented to be their leader becaus they appreciate the business. They will generally accept such a person to embody the values and ideals of their people. Research has consistently shown that perhaps, above all other factors, people vote and endorse someone they can recognize their society values with. No one will allow themselves to be led or influence or even consider modelling them if they do not find what they have in common.
Of course, some argue that the role models, leaders and heros may change and uphold values that are not in line with the society values they represent citing that people change: as change is a constant thing. However, this does not hold true as more often than not, leaders and heros are the product of the society they represent as well as the values and ideals of the society. The likelihood of them changing derailing from the societal values and ideals they were brought up with is next to zero. Therefore, the society produce heros and role models that reflect and represent what the society stands for.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 703, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...on of the societal values. If he or she doesnt conform to the values of the society, t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, as regards, for example, for instance, in fact, of course, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2391.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 508.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70669291339 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51059738532 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438976377953 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 768.6 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 15.0 4.99550561798 300% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9936533147 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.956521739 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0869565217 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21739130435 5.21951772744 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381928350751 0.243740707755 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131296118604 0.0831039109588 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11061805354 0.0758088955206 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264538063534 0.150359130593 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0769809996724 0.0667264976115 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.