Claim: The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.
Reason: Heroes and role models reveal a society's highest ideals.
A society is made up of people who more often than not, share common beliefs, customs, practices, ideals and mentality. The actions of the society reflect the actions of the people. Whatever the people do or think tells us about the type of the society they belong to. This is why, the personalities who the people of the society aspire to become like, give us an idea about the character of the society. The choice of our role models tells about the kind of person we aspire to be. Additionally, it conveys our ideals, ambitions and aspirations.
Most often, we try to assign the person we wish to be on an individual who is accomplished and is a manifestation of our ideals. Such an individual has a very great impact on our lives. The heroes and role models chosen by people contain those qualities that are admired the most by the people. They aspire more and more to become like them and then have the same impact as their heroes have on the world. A significant amount of knowledge about the personality of the person can be deciphered from their heroes and role models. These people are the ones that make up a society. Thus, a society’s character can be known by examining the character of the men and women they admire. It can lead us to concrete knowledge about the mentality of the society. Let us understand a negative example of this case. For instance, if a group of young men living in South-East Asia have their role model as Osama Bin Laden, the terrorist mastermind behind many attacks all over the world, then we can tell about those young men that they are very much likely to become violent sadists. It can be inferred that their mentality most likely is to kill anyone who does not conform to their ideals, values and ideas. Therefore, choice of the society’s heroes and role models gives a very concrete idea about the character and mentality of the society.
Even on considering all the above given points, it is true that if a person is determined enough to be guided by only his own ideals and principles, then no external factor, no matter how strong, can deviate the person from what he is determined to do. The admiration and faith we place in our role models and heroes can be fleeting and we might realize after some time that the person is not really good enough to be our role model because we should not aspire to be someone like him/her. But for this, we should be really certain about what values should be obtained from these so-called role models and what should not be obtained.
Most often, people fail to distinguish between the virtues and the vices of their role models and heroes and they blindly follow them. Therefore, I rest my case in saying that by examining the character of the role models and heroes of a society, we can determine the type of society it is.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, so, then, therefore, thus, for instance, kind of, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 33.0505617978 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2318.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 507.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57199211045 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47637672307 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.428007889546 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 754.2 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.575213379 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.782608696 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0434782609 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.34782608696 5.21951772744 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252091640584 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.087898888229 0.0831039109588 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0896360268555 0.0758088955206 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184940564006 0.150359130593 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0759315009683 0.0667264976115 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 12.1639044944 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.