Claim: The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.
Reason: Heroes and role models reveal a society's highest ideals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
According to the author, we had better study heroes chosen by society in order to understand society itself. The reason is that these models represent the highest ideals the society believes. In what follows, I will reject the main thesis suggested by the author, although I will agree with the reason he offers. My argument is based on a logical observation: there is a tenue logic implication between the reason and the thesis.
The fact that heroes chosen by society reveal society’s highest ideals seems to be unquestionable. If this was not the case, why would heroes be chosen? Normally, people chose other people as their heroes because they are attractive; their attractivness can be explained by many factors but at least this should be conceded: they represent the ideals society believe or they are the means to make these ideals implemented. Incidentally, with “high ideal” I mean what society considers to be most important – there is no moral connotation. Therefore, Mussolini or Hitler revealed the ideals, dreams, and values of the Italian and German society, even though these ideals were deleterious and unethichal. They were chose by these societies as heroes, since they could permit them to realize certain project – conquering other countries, for example.
However, although the reason offered by the author is compelling is incapable of supporting the main thesis. In fact, it is possible to accept that reason and refute the thesis: there is a weak logical relationship between studying heroes and saying that this is the best method for studying society. Of course, heroes represent society’s creed. However, there are two aspects that are worth keeping in mind. First, there can be a huge gap between heroes and common people. Normally, heroes are chosen as such because they are superior: they have certain qualities common people do not own. Therefore, qualities of society cannot successfully be inferred from heroes’qualities. Mussolini was a shrewd politician, unlike a great number of Italian people, for example.
Second, it is true that models can change over time, while society remains the same. An agricultural society might be the same, even there are different majors chosen as heroes. In addition, there could be different heroes contrasting to each other within the same society. Just consider current Italian political situation. There is Matteo Salvini, who is appreciated by 20 million of Italian people and there is Luigi di Maio, who is appreciated by 20 million of Italian people. Lugi di Maio and Matteo Salvini has been displaying different personalities and political view. What can we say about Italian society? It would be bizarre if we said that the best way to study it is to study either Matteo Salvini or Luigi di Maio. What we found in Salvini, for example, could not applied to 20 million of Italian people.
In conclusion, the author support his reasoning with a compelling reason. However, his conclusion cannot be supported by this reason thanks to the logical form of the reasoning. Two reasons weaken the author thesis: heroes’s qualities and people’s are different; heroes are not very representative. We had better study common people for better understanding society. After all, society is neither less nor more than common people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 350, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'ideals'' or 'ideal's'?
Suggestion: ideals'; ideal's
... should be conceded: they represent the ideals society believe or they are the means t...
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Line 3, column 729, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'chosen'.
Suggestion: chosen
...e deleterious and unethichal. They were chose by these societies as heroes, since the...
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Line 7, column 779, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'apply'
Suggestion: apply
...ound in Salvini, for example, could not applied to 20 million of Italian people. In ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, incidentally, second, so, therefore, while, after all, at least, for example, i mean, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, of course, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 41.0 19.5258426966 210% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2814.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 536.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86903904685 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47947761194 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 873.0 704.065955056 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.2370786517 158% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.6134831355 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.9375 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.75 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28125 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 10.2758426966 224% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22024322872 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0680261514588 0.0831039109588 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0675086314029 0.0758088955206 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14263634382 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385219019613 0.0667264976115 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 100.480337079 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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