Claim: The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.
Reason: Heroes and role models reveal a society's highest ideals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
The characters of heroes and role can be illuminating about the characteristics and proclivities of that society. We have observed the hero worship and phenomenon of role models since the birth of human civilization. The prompt recommends that the most effective way to comprehend the nature and fibre of a society is to study its heroes and role models. I strongly disagree with the claim being made, which will be further illustrated in the two paragraphs below.
To begin, in a lot of cases and examples, the characteristics can often reveal the basest of that society's nature. For instance, in Germany in the 1930s, when Adolf Hitler just came to power, he was extolled by a significant portion of the German population. They continued supporting him even though he was committing one of the greatest genocides in the history. The genocidal mania, as demonstrated by Hitler, actually displayed an ugly, hateful and noxious side of the German population's psyche. Thus, in this case, instead of showing the highest ideals, the heroes of the Germany after first world war displayed the lowest ideals of humanity. Another example is the glorification of Genghis Khan by Mongolian people, even though he was responsible for the decimation of millions of people. Mongolian people ,who are very peaceful and wary of conflict and violence, are antithetical to the ideals and qualities demonstrated by the study of Genghis.
Further, society is dynamic, and, thus, the heroes representing that society are often not instructed of the present state of that society. An example includes the glorification of Greek philosopher like Socrates by the Greek population in the 21st century. Greek society has very little in common with ancient Greece. In this case, we see a society showing its gratitude and appreciation for a figure, who have very little in common with them, for the contributions in philosophy made in ancient Greece. Now Greece has moved past the ages of plutocracy and slave ownership. Another example includes the idolization of Thomas Jefferson, who used to be a slave owner, by Americans even though, ideologically Americans do not support slavery. Therefore, it further displays that heroes are not representative of the values and ideals of a society.
In conclusion, due to the dynamic nature of societies and often the antithetical base nature of heroes, heroes are not representative of the highest ideals of a society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2056.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 396.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19191919192 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00993999976 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 215.323595506 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515151515152 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.4714838168 60.3974514979 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 108.210526316 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8421052632 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.89473684211 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248264097089 0.243740707755 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0718938644395 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0808638875455 0.0758088955206 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155239293043 0.150359130593 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0830882086939 0.0667264976115 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.