The following is part of a memorandum from the president of Humana University."Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent. During the same year, Omni showed a sign

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The following is part of a memorandum from the president of Humana University.

"Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent. During the same year, Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space, most likely because online instruction takes place via the Internet. In contrast, over the past three years, enrollment at Humana University has failed to grow and the cost of maintaining buildings has increased. Thus, to increase enrollment and solve the problem of budget deficits at Humana University, we should initiate and actively promote online degree programs like those at Omni."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

While it may be true that Humana University ought to initiate and assuade students to enroll in their online degree programs, the author doesn't make a cogent case for this argument. For this argument to be properly evaluated, three unwarranted assumption must be resolved.

Firstly, the author assumes that Omni University, where enrollment for online degree programs has seen an increase, has a decreasing number of students enrolled in their offline courses. Therefore, the author assumes that the expenditures for maintaining dormitory and classroom space have abated due to the shortened number of students taking courses in the university location. The author doesn't make a clear and solid connection between the rise in enrollment of online degree programs and the falling cost of university's spending. Therefore, the argument is severely weakened.

Additionally, the author doesn't make a clear cut connection showing that the enrollment of students in online courses is going to be a positive solution to the dilemma of budget deficits. The author is assuming that just because the university is going to save money on the maintenance of classroom space and building, the university is going to save money overall. For example, if Omni university wants to promulgate and advertise their online classes, they may have to end to end spending lot more than they would have saved due to the ostentatious costs associated with advertising and maintenance of the IT infrastructure needed to operate their online programs. Therefore, the argument doesn't hold water.

Finally, the author assumes that actively promoting the university will help to lure in more students in their online courses for Omni University. The author doesn't establish a clear cut and solid evidence to show that marketing and promoting actually helps to bring in more students in online programs. Therefore, the author should cite published papers to strengthen his argument.

In conclusion, the arguments are significantly flawed. The author should clearly cite how pivoting to online courses helps to save money , and also actively promoting will increase the number of students in their online courses.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, first, firstly, if, may, so, then, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1858.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 341.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44868035191 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84236997299 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451612903226 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.008300147 57.8364921388 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.866666667 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7333333333 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.93333333333 5.70786347227 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18397147383 0.218282227539 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0692638998193 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064482102323 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117910566372 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432237050697 0.0628817314937 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.5979740519 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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