Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
The claim stating that young people are often told to follow their dreams as dreams are inhenrently selfish is generalising the statement that they should be picking worthy goals. I disagree with the given claim and reason as each dream is unique to a specific individual and comparing it with "worthy goals" is tearing the dream apart in the first place.
Every person has different ambitions and hence we cannot standardise what can be termed as worthy and what can be termed as unworthy. Having selfish dreams is also not a necessarily bad trait as long as that it doesnt interefere with somebody else's well-being. For instance, a person's journey to heal spiritually in private need not be selfish. It can simply be termed as being reserved. If working towards one's goals is termed as selfish, then at some point of time everyone is guilty of being selfish atleast once in their lifetime.
Dreams are a part of your subconscious mind and hence it is not impertive that every dream is centered around attainbale targets. We often forget that many of us do not even have control over our dreams. Many pyschologists are yet to understand what triggers dreams and what are the implications of such dreams. Negative and positive thoughts are a reflection of what a person has gone through in a day or in a given period of time. Basing goals on these dreams is not a correct measure of achieving a goal whether intellectual, moral, social or financial.
Having said that, these young people are future leaders of the nation. If they do not see their goals as achievable, they may lose all hope for the cause. Therefore, we must encourage selflessness amongst the youth. This thought will carry a heavy weight on their conscience and changes can be seen around us basis what they want to follow.
In conclusion, one should follow their dreams based on what goal they have in mind rather than forming worthy goals beforehand and then working selfishly towards it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...has gone through in a day or in a given period of time. Basing goals on these dreams is not a ...
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Message: Did you mean 'heavyweight'?
Suggestion: heavyweight
...st the youth. This thought will carry a heavy weight on their conscience and changes can be...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...carry a heavy weight on their conscience and changes can be seen around us basis ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, may, so, then, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 58.6224719101 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1643.0 2235.4752809 73% => OK
No of words: 338.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86094674556 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63412819552 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550295857988 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 704.065955056 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.2491376254 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6470588235 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8823529412 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05882352941 5.21951772744 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270949130283 0.243740707755 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0844548375555 0.0831039109588 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0758629022066 0.0758088955206 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159169141107 0.150359130593 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0874350396281 0.0667264976115 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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