Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
The claim made in the above statements suggests that the government of any nation should extend a financial support to the major cities for them to thrive. The reasoning behind such a claim is that the nation’s cultural traditions will be preserved and generated if such an action is undertaken by the government. I would go against this claim and the supportive reasoning by stating that the major cities, now a days are more often the financial, fashion or political capitals of a nation. In order to preserve the traditional culture of a nation, the government should sponsor the rural areas of a country where the true essence of tradition resides.
Rolling back a couple of centuries, cities like Rome, Delhi, Paris and many greater historical cities were the epitome of the cultural tradition in their respective countries. Prominent historical rulers were known to have ruled the major cities of the world and they made sure that the cultural heritage is maintained all over the country, more so in the cities that they ruled from. Hence, modern day Rome or Delhi are home to many historical monuments of great significance. Be it the Colosseum or the Red Fort that resides in Delhi. The engravings made on the walls of these monuments were reminiscent of the cultural traditions of those times. Sadly, these cities no more personify the cultural traditions that they used to. With the influx of migrant workers, the cities at present have become more of a cosmopolitan area which rarely reflects the cultural outline of the nation or even the city.
The government should rather invest in the rural areas of a city where the cultural traditions still form the backbone of the society. Hand loom industry is one of the oldest industries to have survived over the span of hundreds of years. They have even survived the British Colonial rule and still exist in the rural parts of India. The fine details that the craftsman follow in order to make the hand-loom clothes truly signify the cultural traditions of India. The Government of India therefore should invest money in the hand-loom industries to keep a cultural tradition alive. They could provide tax exemptions that would encourage the citizens to invest in hand-loom clothes rather than international ready-made garments. Made in India initiative, started by the Prime Minister of India, Mr. Narendra Modi was a much needed impetus to these local industries and it promoted the goods that can be produced in India and made many citizens realize that investing in local garments would eventually help boost the economy of India.
The main purpose of lending a financial support to the major cities is to preserve and generate the cultural tradition of the nation. I would partly agree with this claim by stating that since the major monuments of the history reside in some of the major cities of the nation, part of the funding should go towards preserving these pieces of history. But, in order to keep the cultural tradition alive, I am a staunch advocate that, majority of the money should be put into reviving the traditional industries of our nation, like the hand-loom industry. Such a step would ensure that the cultural tradition of a nation is being generated as well carried forward for the future generations to experience it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 408, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...oning by stating that the major cities, now a days are more often the financial, fashion o...
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Line 1, column 412, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...g by stating that the major cities, now a days are more often the financial, fashion o...
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Line 10, column 239, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ajor monuments of the history reside in some of the major cities of the nation, part of the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, so, still, therefore, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 83.0 58.6224719101 142% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2765.0 2235.4752809 124% => OK
No of words: 555.0 442.535393258 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98198198198 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85370353223 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62021881294 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463063063063 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 882.9 704.065955056 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2020163664 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.681818182 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2272727273 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.90909090909 5.21951772744 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424263329303 0.243740707755 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130270915594 0.0831039109588 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103135733466 0.0758088955206 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277719861309 0.150359130593 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117832283803 0.0667264976115 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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