Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Over the years value of cultural traditions is degrading in almost every country, city or community. The claim attempts to argue that the financial support should be provided to the major cities to succeed and the reason attempts to prove the claim by concluding that in cities, the cultural traditions are preserved and generated. However, I mostly disagree with this claim that it is the government who ensure the financial support for major cities.
To begin, just receiving financial support is not adequate for city to be successful. Further, it may be difficult for government to understand the amount of money the city needs. It is almost impossible to estimate the exact figure of amount for any particular city. For example, there are multiple things - like roads, bridges, public transportation, etc - where cities need money for its development. In addition, it can be arduous for government to distribute funds among various cities. Moreover, the funds is not only distributed among cities, it is also distributed among the rural areas.
Furthermore, the culture and traditions are not only preserved in cities. However, instead, they are more preserved across the rural areas than cities. It is the rural areas or village areas where the cultural traditions are begin valued and even performed. For example, the urban people are more concern with their fashionable and luxurious lifestyles defying the cultural traditions. In addition, villagers live a simple austere life by maintain their tradition. Thus, instead of supporting cities, the rural areas must be financially support to enhanced their development.
Admittedly, it is the major cities which have huge impact on the national economy and due to this more and more people are shifting to cities to make a way of living better. For example, it is difficult in village area to receive network, whereas in cities network is ubiquitous. In addition, there are amply amount of work opportunities in major cities, whereas it is extremely difficult to have a job while living in village. Thus, the people are moving to cities and hence the culture too because culture is present where people are present.
To conclude, government only ensuring financial support for major cities would be discrimination for the people living outside the cities. Additionally, majority of culture is preserved in the safe hands of rural people. But I do admit that it is also cities which define the overall nation’s culture.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'being'?
Suggestion: being
...areas where the cultural traditions are begin valued and even performed. For example,...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'begun'.
Suggestion: begun
...areas where the cultural traditions are begin valued and even performed. For example,...
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Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'amounts'?
Suggestion: amounts
...biquitous. In addition, there are amply amount of work opportunities in major cities, ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r cities would be discrimination for the people living outside the cities. Additi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, whereas, while, for example, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2090.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 399.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2380952381 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78659307458 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461152882206 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 670.5 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.2073916019 60.3974514979 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.0 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1363636364 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95454545455 5.21951772744 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315764890665 0.243740707755 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0991958783985 0.0831039109588 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650017880322 0.0758088955206 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199534585334 0.150359130593 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0751321203354 0.0667264976115 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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