Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and
the reason on which that claim is based.
The major cities of a country are usually the seats of its cultural, economical and political dominance, and home to celebrities and stars. Needless to say, they are the biggest, most habituated, busiest and the liveliest places in any nation or state. Hence, they garner the most attention from governments and general citizens, alike. However, they are not the only centres of cultural traditions of the whole nation. In fact, some remote societies do not even possess any major city, for example the hill tribes of North East India, the gypsies of Mongolia, etc. Moreover, throughout the world there are a number of towns or suburbs that are abound with rich history, culture and art and none of them fall in the category of a major city. Therefore, it will impartial on the part of any Government to concentrate financing only the major cities with the claim that they preserve and promote the cultural traditions.
First of all, very few nations have had a single unique culture among its populace, all throughout its history. Most countries of the present day are a motley of rich historical and cultural diversity. India, China, the whole of Europe, Latin American nations, have all had many different rulers, absorbed a huge variety of traditions, had many capital cities, and are now replete with a myriad of indigenous cultural groups scattered all about the respective countries. The major cities of today are not representative of the cultural vivacity prevalent in a whole nation. Some of the most historically and culturally rich places are not even known much outside its boundaries. For instance, the capital city of Brussels in Belgium might be the most prominent hub, yet a silent city called Bruges features an abundance of medieval architecture and history, was home to an exuberance of art and cultural heritage. It is also called the ‘Venice of the North’ and happens to be the place where Micheangelo’s ‘Madonna and Child’ is located. Despite the prodigious cultural presence, Burges is not a major city. Another instance can be drawn from one of the most unexplored and silent North East Indian river island of Majuli. It is dubbed as the cultural capital of the state of Assam, and happens to be the world’s largest fresh water island. The idyllic river island is resplendent with a number of major festivals throughout the year, vibrant art and Vaishnavite culture. Yet, it is not even a city and remains to draw enough attention from the Indian government. So if Government of India finances Guwahati (only major city in Assam) for its development, it would do little to protect and promote the opulent art and culture in Majuli. Guwahati, thus is not representative of the whole of Assam. The governments should therefore disseminate equivalent funds to all the concerned places if they intend to preserve the cultural traditions.
In addition, history of the world is testimony to the fact that some of the most culturally vibrant indegenous tribes and civilisations never had any major city. The nomads, the gypsies, steppes, the hill tribes of North East India, some African tribes were more of wanderers until they settled in the places they now inhabit, in the nooks and crannies of certain countries. Their cultures and traditions do not lack vibrancy. The only asset they never possessed is perhaps a cultural hub to call their own. If the Governments around the world finances the major cities by reasoning that they are the centres of cultural civilisations, the cultures of these indigenous tribes would never be represented. They would gradually die out causing a disturbance and a void in the cultural diversity of that particular nation.
Moreover, if the governments focuses their funds only on the major cities, attention to the other vital sectors like agriculture would be compromised. Agriculture is one sector which is not feasible within a city and is mostly carried out in the suburbs. With the lack of equity in fundings, the agriculturists would gradually leave their trade and move to the cities, causing the problem of urbanisation in the cities and pauity of food in the country.
There is of course no doubt that the major cities house the most important art galleries, museums, sports centres, studios, theaters and provide huge opportunities to artists of all types. Yet, this alone should not be the reason for these cities to be the most funded places. There might be places of even greater cultural dominance which might contain unexplored talents and budding artists. The governments must therefore meticulously examine and employ careful and uniform funding practises to all the concerned places for an optimal growth in the nation.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'no doubt', 'of course', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.263824884793 0.238963963785 110% => OK
Verbs: 0.103686635945 0.154291517835 67% => OK
Adjectives: 0.110599078341 0.0886310499679 125% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0587557603687 0.0506014161523 116% => OK
Pronouns: 0.028801843318 0.0449626384858 64% => OK
Prepositions: 0.114055299539 0.123526278965 92% => OK
Participles: 0.0161290322581 0.0379742944744 42% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.77632204847 2.82910677849 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0195852534562 0.0316879551592 62% => OK
Particles: 0.00230414746544 0.0014075125626 164% => OK
Determiners: 0.124423963134 0.0950106342287 131% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0149769585253 0.0245489744465 61% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00460829493088 0.0157978311181 29% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 4734.0 2899.98275862 163% => OK
No of words: 776.0 478.390804598 162% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.10051546392 6.0591788892 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.27795192801 4.65681771538 113% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.381443298969 0.369966551584 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.292525773196 0.285172536893 103% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.201030927835 0.207245337619 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.135309278351 0.136322040163 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77632204847 2.82910677849 98% => OK
Unique words: 344.0 234.298850575 147% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443298969072 0.492565540709 90% => OK
Word variations: 57.6911034964 56.8184620615 102% => OK
How many sentences: 35.0 21.1264367816 166% => OK
Sentence length: 22.1714285714 23.7468607788 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3440084188 62.0618507366 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.257142857 143.81877709 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1714285714 23.7468607788 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.457142857143 0.728815259664 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.87931034483 102% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.71264367816 78% => OK
Readability: 51.424005891 52.2641144681 98% => OK
Elegance: 2.06024096386 1.64547068916 125% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30238744552 0.39480681544 77% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.101891806455 0.11556216369 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0529077240822 0.0736162880345 72% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.535516706464 0.531340600358 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.143912081689 0.15197228837 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131256962706 0.158818324754 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0593840091711 0.0851127212816 70% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.611490880707 0.388921930462 157% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.101123633288 0.0677916285025 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254654614704 0.28015025965 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0311992882944 0.0610219844235 51% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.8591954023 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.30459770115 57% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.96264367816 262% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 18.0 8.10632183908 222% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.93390804598 76% => OK
Neutral topic words: 12.0 3.04597701149 394% => Less neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 33.0 15.0862068966 219% => OK
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Rates: 70.17 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 4.0 Out of 6