(claim)It is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as a hero. [Reason] The reputation of anyone who is subjected to media scrutiny will eventually be diminished. [Specific Task Instruction: Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.]
In modern society where media coverage is ubiquitous,there is a claim that no living man or woman can be regarded as heroes because their reputation will eventually be diminished by media scrutiny.In my opinion,it is undeniable that media coverage sometimes expose wrong things of heroes,deteriorating their reputation;however,such exposure do not necessary mean a hero’s positive image will collapse,society may still regard them as heroes.
In the first place,no one is flawless.Therefore,if every aspect of one’s life is exposed to the public by the media,some of his or her behaviors might not be accepted as a moral standard of a hero.Besides,media may exaggerate a hero’s negative side in order to gain more publicity.For example,a brave doctor who is willing to take the risk of infection to save others might commit adultery.If it revealed, his reputation would be defamed.In such extreme cases,media scrutiny could focus on this crime,and bias public opinion towards him.
That being said, the argument above assumes that heroes commit crime and media choose to focus on this negative aspect. This assumption,however, could be wrong.With regard of first part, few heroes will commit crime or seriously breach morality.Besides, media may not be willing to waste time on scrutinizing every aspect of a hero due to limited resources and perhaps weak public resonance it can provoke.Media may choose to report the brave behavior the hero take and praise him as a hero of society.Most of people are willing to hear the positive thing happen in the society.Therefore,the media which are inclined to report positive things will not waste time to find the fault of a hero.
Even if the negative aspect of a hero is revealed by media,it is still necessary for society to regard him or her as a hero.To understand this claim,we should revisit the definition of hero.Heroes are those who have particular qualities which are admired by people,such as brave,self-sacrifice,and commitment to public interest. Therefore,as long as those qualities are not proved to be false by the media,heroes can exist despite of their negative aspect.Let’s return to aforementioned imaginary doctor.If he indeed saves people’s live by sacrificing his own ,it’s not surprising at all that he will still be regarded as a hero.It is the contribution which he did that overweight the stain on his character and earn him to the tile of hero.
To summarize,it is true that media scrutiny has the potential to diminish a hero’s reputation.Since people are inherently imperfect,the media could deliberately focus on the negative.However,the media may not necessarily do this,and turn to praise their positive behaviour to attract people’s attention.Even if the media did so, the public would still accept them because they have qualities that a hero need.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, for example, such as, in my opinion, it is true, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2410.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 448.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37946428571 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.67010989381 2.79657885939 131% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502232142857 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 785.7 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.2370786517 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 64.0 23.0359550562 278% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 139.106037956 60.3974514979 230% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 344.285714286 118.986275619 289% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 64.0 23.4991977007 272% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.2857142857 5.21951772744 350% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 47.0 7.80617977528 602% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272922395406 0.243740707755 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149173120008 0.0831039109588 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598485309925 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172135776122 0.150359130593 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0594328206417 0.0667264976115 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 35.9 14.1392134831 254% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -10.41 48.8420337079 -21% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.92365168539 216% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 30.6 12.1743820225 251% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.81 12.1639044944 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.79 8.38706741573 129% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 32.5 11.8971910112 273% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 27.6 11.2143820225 246% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 11.7820224719 263% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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