Claim: Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system.Reason: Laws cannot change what is in people's hearts or minds.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reas

The author in the statement argues that many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and legal system. The author’s conclusion is mainly based on an assumption that laws cannot change what is in people’s hearts. Although some people in a country believe that many problems in a modern society cannot be solved by mere law, other agree that law is an only thing on which country or a society is running on legal track. As far as I am concerned, I cannot agree with the author. Laws were made by a constitution of a country or a modern society, it must be followed. If not followed, person is punished on circumstance of nature of violation.

Firstly, it is a responsibility of a person in a modern society to follow whatever laws were made by constitution. Violation of the law leads to severe punishment and a person should change his heart to avoid violation. For example, a person breaks or violates traffic signal due to external reason such as for time management, just some time after police will grab him and will punish him as fine or jail. Next time, he would remember what happened last time when he broke signal and will try to follow law by changing mind. Hence, what literally happen, law can change people’ mind to follow it.

However, some laws cannot change what is in people’s mind. As to follow such law is like a burden for them and they seem such law as immoral or can defile their purity. For example, recently supreme court of India intimate result that any person can worship in Sabrimala temple as a temple initially prohibited for women having age is in between 10 to 50 years. But, there was bulk protest from devotees and temple management team, as they obstinate to unfollow law and they seems that such law can defile their deity’s purity. Due to violation of law by bulk people in that society prompt conflicts between police forces and people.

In conclusion, to follow law is well being for both constitution and people in that modern society as it is the only thing which bind people with moral values. Although some laws in a modern society seem to be irrelevant for people in a society, such laws are not in large quantity but they are rare. Violation of law leads to severe punishment such as fine, jail, etc, people in a society should follow them and must change their minds for fulfillment of laws. Moreover, law is a only incentive and a motivating factor, to bring people on legal track and in moral zone.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 481, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'seem'
Suggestion: seem
...they obstinate to unfollow law and they seems that such law can defile their deity&ap...
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Line 7, column 480, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...r fulfillment of laws. Moreover, law is a only incentive and a motivating factor,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, moreover, so, well, as for, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2052.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 440.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66363636364 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59186585205 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445454545455 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 644.4 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2492603486 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.6 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55 5.21951772744 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356510342751 0.243740707755 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136110986732 0.0831039109588 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0977782176246 0.0758088955206 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237326623442 0.150359130593 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111059071445 0.0667264976115 166% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.1639044944 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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