Claim: Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system.
Reason: Laws cannot change what is in people's hearts or minds.
Human society, irrespective of its stage of development, is stuffed with social problems. The primitive society also had problems, and so does the contemporary society, however, the form of social challenges might have varied. Philosophically, the system of law was excogitated to ensure uniformity of justice in society. It is what demarcates the right and wrong and, the laudable and punishable. It is undebated that law has helped to systematize the society, but as it is mainly based on the tenets of fear in the subject that prevents from doing the wrong, the very source of problem, the human psychology (people’s heart and mind), is less affected by it. Therefore, correctly formulated law, based on equity and benevolence, can gradually contribute for the remission of problems; however, the problems having provenance in the human psychology, remains suppressed deep within, which upon outburst reflects the shortcoming of legal system.
Effectiveness of law has its roots on its long term execution and acceptability. In this condition, it gradually works on human behavior, ultimately redressing our wrong activities. Nepal, one of the least developed country, had a deep seated problem of untouchability based on class. Considering it as a taint in modern society, the government passed the law to abolish untouchability few decades ago. Today, the descendants of the patrician family blithely share a drink with the one from previously low class family. This is the emblematic case where the law can assist in changing the human behavior in long term, and eventually bring a social problem to an end.
However, it is also true that, no enforcement can play effectively on our hearts or mind. We have been blessed with free thinking ability; some use it for ingenuity and innovation, while some put it on heinousness activities. Unlike the problems based on superstition and cultural orthodoxy, rape, vandalism, extortion have their origin in ill human mentality. Law tends to suppress these challenges of modern society by causing fear of punishment in the subject. Nevertheless these incidences occur frequently; reflecting the inundation of suppressed wickedness. Rather than legal system other measures like social awareness, increasing people’s participation in creative activities, equality of employment, etc. can palliate these type of problem.
Finally, it can be accepted that law can be efficacious in solving some of the social stigma of modern society. These can mainly appease people by abolishing inequity other problems based on wrong cultural believes. However, the problems based on ill mentality of the very individual human psychology, although can be oppressed by law, can be better subjugated by measures other than legal system.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 465, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
...sing fear of punishment in the subject. Nevertheless these incidences occur frequently; refl...
Line 13, column 68, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE
Message: Simply use 'some'.
... that law can be efficacious in solving some of the social stigma of modern society. These ...
Line 13, column 207, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF
Message: Did you mean 'beliefs' (noun) instead of believes (verb)?
... other problems based on wrong cultural believes. However, the problems based on ill men...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2359.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 431.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47331786543 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10724746103 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547563805104 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 749.7 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.9880632201 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.227272727 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5909090909 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.04545454545 5.21951772744 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 5.13820224719 272% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230324474069 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0653543319266 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545035872036 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146819789222 0.150359130593 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355164364604 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.1639044944 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.38706741573 116% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 100.480337079 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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