Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible.
Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which
of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples
to support your opinion. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use
memorized examples.
The worth of independence desired by young adults depend on their intention behind such demand. Independence, if it is considered as being self-dependent, is propitious and leads to growth and development. However, if it is perceived as a freedom devoid of responsibilities, it might result in counterintuitive outcomes Therefore, the very concept of independence inscribed in the thought process determines its moment. The importuned independence can be productive for some while the opposite for others, depending on one's reason for the demand.
A friend of mine held the reputation of being notorious and frivolous. His parents were highly concerned about his present and future. They were stringent towards his aberrant behavior, which he disliked. He grew up amassing hostility and animosity towards his parents and always demanded independence from family so that he could revel his life in his way. Eventually, as their wit and grit didn't work on him, they conceded; he was set free to live his way. The result wasn't unpredictable; he ended up with drinks, drugs and vandalism. Last month, he was arrested for extortion. His parents bailed him and now he is in the rehabilitation center. The independence he desired produced the opposite results.
In contrast to the above example, another friend of mine established her as a successful entrepreneur of the city within a couple of years of leading an independent life. It was obvious to her that sudden release of family support would invite hardships and travail, and she was prepared with a plan to overcome it. The independence allowed her to focus on her career needs and the hardships, in turn, buttressed her to stand the tribulations with imperturbable determination and enthusiasm. As a consequence, surviving through a series of throes and opportunities, she established herself to a position, which today not just provides jobs to others but also supports her family.
It is evident from the above two examples that the justification of independence depends on subjective issues. If independence is desideratum for concentration in goals, to harness the potential and learn from independent efforts, it is very worthy. Instead, if it is desired as a release from parental supervision to live in unguided free will, the probability to be benighted to debauchery and career crash can't be denied.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: didn't
... way. Eventually, as their wit and grit didnt work on him, they conceded; he was set ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...as set free to live his way. The result wasnt unpredictable; he ended up with drinks,...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...enighted to debauchery and career crash cant be denied.
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uchery and career crash cant be denied.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, therefore, thus, while, in contrast, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1992.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26984126984 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25810809053 2.67179642975 122% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560846560847 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8035859338 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164083909762 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.046865413848 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0462506357155 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0971836780615 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039794905114 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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