The issue is based on the ideal that competition deters productivity and cooperation enhances the human performance. However, being integral part of the human psychology; competition and cooperation, both are inevitable in our behavior. As human is a gregarious being, and our society is based on mutual development, cooperation is required before competition. Cooperation always aids in the growth of an individual and people around him, however, competition does the same only when it is devoid of hostility and begrudgeness. Thus, it can be the best to prepare the young people for leadership by instilling in them a sense of both cooperation and healthy competition and censoring bitter competition.
The leaders, in every fields, industry to government, have the responsibility to address the problems of and decide for the larger mass. If the leader isn't inclusive, sagacious and free of vanity, decision made by him can be jaundiced and thus, precipitate breach of trust, result in discontented people and vicissitude. No single being is perfect and has all knowledge and conscience to make the best decision. Rather, the best and accepted results are obtained when one functions by cooperation. It ensures mutual growth and benifit. People in various fields have contributed to the society by their mutuality. The cooperation of Madam Curie and her husband, both are noble laurates, produced greatest discoveries. Cooperation and conilliation between political leaders, based on the principle of mutual acceptance, has solved many dissensions and conflicts around the world. In Nepal, cooperation between Maoists, the armed rebels, and the democratic forces ended the decade long conflict in the nation. Here, the principal of cooperation saved thousands of lives and established peace. Therefore, the young people must, primarily, assimilate the principle of cooperation while dealing with the other human being.
However, there are many instances when the attempt of cooperation fails and competition provides the best results. Hiltler, the egregious dictator, couldn't be mollified by the principle of cooperation. United States had to race in the competition of acquiring the nuclear weapon before he did; to ensure the protection of myriad lives around the world. Had the political leadership relied only on cooperation, the results would have been devastating. Careful judgement of the situation in hand, and following the suitable course of action is the desideratum of good leader.
Therefore, the young people should be taught the puissant of cooperation before competition. However, they must be taught the necessity of competition, after the attempt of cooperation fails; but in either case the mind of the leader being centered in probity and benevolence for noble cause.
The issue is based on the ideal that competition deters productivity and cooperation enhances the human performance. However, being integral part of the human psychology; competition and cooperation, both are inevitable in our behavior. As human is a gregarious being, and our society is based on mutual development, cooperation is required before competition. Cooperation always aids in the growth of an individual and people around him, however, competition does the same only when it is devoid of hostility and begrudgeness. Thus, it can be the best to prepare the young people for leadership by instilling in them a sense of both cooperation and healthy competition and censoring bitter competition.
The leaders, in every fields, industry to government, have the responsibility to address the problems of and decide for the larger mass. If the leader isn't inclusive, sagacious and free of vanity, decision made by him can be jaundiced and thus, precipitate breach of trust, result in discontented people and vicissitude. No single being is perfect and has all knowledge and conscience to make the best decision. Rather, the best and accepted results are obtained when one functions by cooperation. It ensures mutual growth and benifit. People in various fields have contributed to the society by their mutuality. The cooperation of Madam Curie and her husband, both are noble laurates, produced greatest discoveries. Cooperation and conilliation between political leaders, based on the principle of mutual acceptance, has solved many dissensions and conflicts around the world. In Nepal, cooperation between Maoists, the armed rebels, and the democratic forces ended the decade long conflict in the nation. Here, the principal of cooperation saved thousands of lives and established peace. Therefore, the young people must, primarily, assimilate the principle of cooperation while dealing with the other human being.
However, there are many instances when the attempt of cooperation fails and competition provides the best results. Hiltler, the egregious dictator, couldn't be mollified by the principle of cooperation. United States had to race in the competition of acquiring the nuclear weapon before he did; to ensure the protection of myriad lives around the world. Had the political leadership relied only on cooperation, the results would have been devastating. Careful judgement of the situation in hand, and following the suitable course of action is the desideratum of good leader.
Therefore, the young people should be taught the puissant of cooperation before competition. However, they must be taught the necessity of competition, after the attempt of cooperation fails; but in either case the mind of the leader being centered in probity and benevolence for noble cause.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...cide for the larger mass. If the leader isnt inclusive, sagacious and free of vanity...
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Line 3, column 687, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'produced the greatest'.
Suggestion: produced the greatest
...d her husband, both are noble laurates, produced greatest discoveries. Cooperation and conilliati...
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Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...sults. Hiltler, the egregious dictator, couldnt be mollified by the principle of cooper...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, still, therefore, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 33.0505617978 39% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 36.0 12.9106741573 279% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2371.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 429.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52680652681 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06770888489 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519813519814 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 741.6 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.1210389495 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.086956522 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.652173913 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.21739130435 5.21951772744 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.374592777968 0.243740707755 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10692806823 0.0831039109588 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.174841004417 0.0758088955206 231% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227155621272 0.150359130593 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.215182802719 0.0667264976115 322% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.1639044944 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.