Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible.
Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which
of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and exam-
ples to support your opinion. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use
memorized examples.
The globalization world has been forced people to go away, far from their parents and friends to looking for better life opportunities. However, the advice that we do not receive is that the world could be very difficult to young adults. In my opinion is better to live with our parents and close friends, this could offer to us comfortable state to allow people on their seek to improvements in the education process, health and work career.
First of all, living with our parents we do not have some responsibilities as paying for shelter, energy or also food, which could allow us to focus on our studies. As a result, we will possibly get better scores in school or university. About five years ago, I went to the state of Paraiba, Brazil, to attend some campus classes, I was about to start my graduation process. Going to a different place, so longer to my family, I had to pay for my own place and take any kind of budget. I did not get save money for other activities as go to cinemas or even eat delicious foods. This was affecting, as a negative manner, my studies and I was not improving myself as I wished. Therefore, if I lived with my parents, I would probably be able to achieve my best scores and certainly I would be happier.
Secondly, living alone, most part of the people do not have someone who could help in emergence situation, like some diseases or accident. Due to this, is harder to make some actions like buy some pills or even go to hospitals. When I was in the second year of my Biotechnology degree, I was sick. I get some kind of fever caused by a strange type of influenza virus, I thought that I was die. My mother was so far from me, and my friends were going to their family houses. Were summer vacations. I lost almost 10 kilograms of weight. My luck was that my neighbor helped me, leaving me to the hospital. Thus, If I was to my mother’s house, likewise my friends, I will not be so bad, I guess.
Finally, some people need of the emotional supporting by their love ones to cope with some tense circumstances, like jobs interview. So, with supporting people, that could take this place, is easier to them to achieve greats opportunities in big companies. I was about to graduate and The Ambev, a huge drink factor, was making one enormous call, to achieve new employees. I participate in the first stages, but when the face to face will happen, with the boss supervisor, I became so nervous that I did not get to say one word. As a result, I failed. Certainly, If I had had some supporting, this probably did not happen.
Taking all these things into consideration, I strongly support the idea that is better live with our family or people that we love than live alone.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, likewise, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, as to, i guess, kind of, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2228.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48289738431 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64428271036 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51106639839 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 9.59856630824 250% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4602145836 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.6923076923 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1153846154 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15384615385 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159794432494 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0429302246795 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04511905333 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108743769853 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452381341661 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.