It has recently been announced that a new high school may be built in your community. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details in your answer.
The illuminism movement brought to the society criteria approach by spotting light education. Since this, knowledge became the most important thing to achieve in societies around the world. Nowadays this is not different, the education system represents the best way to improve the society. So, if I was asked about building of a new high school in my neighborhood, I would certainly support it because education provide to community technology and human advances.
First of all, the humanity history makes us sure that investments on basis education like middle and high school could change the society reality. The Japanese government invested hardest on education after the second big world war and this afforded their economics rise year’s latter. In addition, another’s areas as technology and human relations could prosper in same time. Thus, if other’s countries as Brazil had taken this as example, the Brazilian society would not be in an economics and politic crises today.
Furthermore, education presented itself as a powerful weapon against racial prejudice and ignorance. The USA was the most racist country around 50’s, they had a separated society where black and white people coexisted in a tense relationship. However, after pressures caused by other’s countries such as South Africa (after Mandela Revolution) and Europe countries could elect the first black president, Barack Obama. This was just possible because education changed mind of the society year by year preparing these people to future.
That way, education have been displayed be the best approach to improve the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 172, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'invested the hardest'.
Suggestion: invested the hardest
...ociety reality. The Japanese government invested hardest on education after the second big world...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, thus, in addition, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 43.0788530466 37% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1382.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 251.0 407.700716846 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50597609562 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7919788876 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.637450199203 0.524837075471 121% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.9540602531 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.307692308 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3076923077 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0776810550755 0.236089414692 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0288442740267 0.076458572812 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0293714248892 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0555326914304 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279737401812 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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