Claim: The surest indicator of a great nation is not the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists.
Reason: The surest indicator of a great nation is actually the welfare of all its people.
Write a reason in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
"Ask not what your country can do for you; ask what you can do for your country," said the former US President, Franklin D. Roosevelt famously. Roosevelt stressed upon the need for the citizens of a nation to sacrifice their needs and comforts for the greater good, which is where our views diverge. In my opinion, the claim and its supporting reason, which put the welfare of citizens above the achievements of its rulers, artists, and scientists, are both correct.
A government is based on the notion of establishing an organization of the people, by the people, and for the people. At its core essence, a government is meant to provide adequately for the needs of the masses. It is baffling, then, that the nations that are so-called "superpowers" in the 21st century, hardly ever live up to this expectation. Consider for example, the US, which is arguably one of the most accomplished countries in terms of scientific progress. While science as a discipline is supposed to make the human life easier and more convenient, it is surprising that the US ranks so low on the Human Happiness Index, much behind Nordic countries such as Finland, Norway, Sweden, etc which are largely welfare states. In the latter countries, although science has yet to catch up to the rapid pace of advancement as in the US, the people are more content with life. One could argue, then, that these countries are more accomplished than the US in achieving the goals that their governments were set out to.
Building upon the implication that human happiness is a better indicator of a great nation, social and economic equities in such a nation must be negligible, if present at all. All factions of such a society must benefit from the same opportunities regardless of gender, race, or faith. Curiously, while most of modern feminism originates in the western countries, the US ranks 51st on the recently conducted global Gender Equality survey. The UK ranks marginally above the US, yet still behind such African countries as Rwanda and Namibia. There are, evidently, many egalitarian societies which have not traditionally enjoyed the limelight of a "great" nation, possibly because they have not scored well on conventional measures of "greatness". For example, in the 20th century, while the world was ravaged with two global wars, it became second-nature for countries to boost their military prowess, at the expense of the public good. While major powers such as the US, North Korea, or Japan poured their resources into building missiles and expanding their nuclear strength, their people were starving in the streets. What good are the achievements of "great" rulers, if they fail to provide the most basic necessities to their subjects?
To conclude, while science and militia may have been put on the pedestal throughout human history, it is high time that we recognize that they are merely a means to an end - the end being a comfortable life for the multitudes. We all know what happens to dictators and authoritarian regimes that, in the name of progress (economic, scientific, or expansive), overlook public welfare - the public rises against them. An amiable, content population that is well taken care of by the government, thus, is surely the best indicator of a great nation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 86, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...ou; ask what you can do for your country,' said the former US President, Franklin...
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Line 3, column 645, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... traditionally enjoyed the limelight of a 'great' nation, possibly beca...
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Line 3, column 1234, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...ulers, if they fail to provide the most basic necessities to their subjects? To conclude, while...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, may, second, so, still, then, thus, well, while, for example, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2784.0 2235.4752809 125% => OK
No of words: 546.0 442.535393258 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0989010989 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83390555256 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06257444746 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 292.0 215.323595506 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534798534799 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 853.2 704.065955056 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9206155787 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.571428571 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47619047619 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183852089242 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.049737373629 0.0831039109588 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594145525644 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110277257196 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414572186209 0.0667264976115 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 150.0 100.480337079 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.