College students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
Determining social level and the future occupation, choosing major of study is undeniably one of the most significant decisions in anybody's life. Some people hold the view that students should select their area of study based on an availability of job in that field. While this view has its own merit, I believe one of the most important criteria in choosing a major of study should be students’ interest. In the following lines, I will elaborate more on my perspective.
To begin, it is apparent that when people love something they have internal motivation to do their best. If students choose their area of study based on their interest, they enjoy every second of studying, class participating, completing projects and so forth. They become engaged in different classes and would likely to make a strong network with classmates and professors. Therefore after graduation, they have a strong resume, know many people in their field, know any job opportunity and they are likely to find a proper job. On the other hand, if students select their major solely based on job availability and not their interest, they, mostly, do not have enough motivation to study and get remarkable scores. Thus, after graduation, even if there are many job opportunities, in most cases they do not have the remarkable resume to be selected as a job candidate. Moreover, even if they get a job, they do not enjoy their time and it is less likely to make any progress.
Additionally, one important issue is that job availability has not been fixed ever. For example, in my country, there were many job opportunities in engineering majors between approximately 1990-2010. Most of the students regardless of their real interest would select mathematics in high-school and engineering majors in university. There was a fierce competition among students to be accepted in one of the best universities. However, after some years number of graduated engineering students exceed the number of jobs and also their wage decreased considerably. At the moment, there are many graduate students in the field of engineering are jobless. As a result, students cannot rely on current job availability, since many others do and this would result in a change in supply and demand for a job, which causes inequity.
In sum, based on above discussion, although finding a good job is an important issue in student’s life, they should not base their choice of major only on this criteria, since they have to go on without internal motivation and as a result they cannot do their best and their chances to get a job would decrease. Moreover, all students know about popular trend of job availability and this makes a shift in supply and demand in the job market, which causes lower wages and lack of job for many graduated people. So students should definitely follow their kind heart and not their cruel and lying mind!
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 62, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to major'
Suggestion: to major
...vel and the future occupation, choosing major of study is undeniably one of the most ...
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Line 4, column 377, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...network with classmates and professors. Therefore after graduation, they have a strong re...
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Line 8, column 161, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... not base their choice of major only on this criteria, since they have to go on with...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, as a result, in most cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2420.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 484.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85368801337 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460743801653 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 770.4 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.10617977528 354% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.812894392 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.238095238 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0476190476 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 5.21951772744 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389690119661 0.243740707755 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124898300439 0.0831039109588 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108512667532 0.0758088955206 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262086103066 0.150359130593 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395162618387 0.0667264976115 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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