Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and
explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you
should address both of the views presented.
Because of the myriad of choices and the violent competition to secure a promising future, students are often torn between pursuing a field they love and the one that possesses the maximum assurance of a sustainable job opportunity. During such tumultuous times when choosing a field becomes necessary, most heartfelt desire of most students is to pursue a line that intrests them the most, and to land in a lucrative job in that field. However, that is quite an ideal world. In reality, both passion and a job are seldom offered in the same platter and that scenario is only reserved for a fortunate few. Hence while deciding which course to follow, much deliberation and discernment is required and students need to find a viable balance between their own preferences and the job market. However, it is a necessary truth that without passion, one can hardly endure a job however lucrative, because one does not find the drive to work relentlessly and productively.
While the job market is obviously a concern for securing a stable future, yet passion eventually appears to be the larger determinant while seeking a field. This is because, passion drives and motivates one to pursue a field relentlessly. Success comes easy as one can find the fervor to assiduously follow the suject. One can be at peace with oneself if the desired fields are pursued since it elicits interest and brings joy. In contrast, pursuing a field forcibly makes one suffer the brunt of its consequences. The subject appears dull and uninteresting, the student eventually looses the vigour to pursue it, and even landing at a job makes living difficult to endure. The history is repleate with such examples. For instance, Jean Tirole is an influential economist today and considered a potential Nobel prize winner. It was after he received a Ph.D in mathematics in Paris that he decided to abandon his field and pursue what he likes. He enrolled in a Ph.D program in Economics from MIT nad obtained his second major. He is now a great economist. Had he pursued Mathematics, the world would have been bereft of his talent and the contributions in Economics. College students are therefore required to thoroughly examine the options and pursue the one that taps their endowed talent. Talent never goes wasted.
Furthermore, we have other examples of successful and passionate entrepreneurs and world personalities who started off small but contributed enormously in the fields they pursued. The one thing that binds Mark Zuckerberg, Walt Disney, Bill Gates, Oprah Winfrey and Steve Jobs is that each one of these personalities followed what they loved. Although each were overwhelmed by the hitches and thorns in their chosen paths at one time or the other, none gave up to pursue easier and more lucrative job fields. Because they followed their passion, the world has been endowed with their
variegated contributions. These personalities demonstrate that with passion, be it in any field, it is possible to soar high.
Even though sometimes it is the financial burden in the form of education loans, or family responsibilities that drives students to seek careers that can benefit financially from, yet in the long run passion turns out to be a deciding factor as to whether they can sustain it the field. Many a times, people are thrown into a sorrowful state of desolation and dejection because they do not derive the joy out of their work. They finally leave their jobs after some period of working and eventually set up businesses they like.
In conclusion, for a student the path to success is riddled with many contradictory options and choices. For the reasons discussed above, students should not choose a field of study based on insecurity. It is talent and the accompanying passion that ultimately decides success.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'as to', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'in contrast']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.229437229437 0.240241500013 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.17316017316 0.157235817809 110% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0764790764791 0.0880659088768 87% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0505050505051 0.0497285424764 102% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0533910533911 0.0444667217837 120% => OK
Prepositions: 0.105339105339 0.12292977631 86% => OK
Participles: 0.037518037518 0.0406280797675 92% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.82087636664 2.79330140395 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.027417027417 0.030933414821 89% => OK
Particles: 0.00577200577201 0.0016655270985 347% => OK
Determiners: 0.106782106782 0.0997080785238 107% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.010101010101 0.0249443105267 40% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.017316017316 0.0148568991511 117% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3822.0 2732.02544248 140% => OK
No of words: 633.0 452.878318584 140% => OK
Chars per words: 6.03791469194 6.0361032391 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.01592376844 4.58838876751 109% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.380726698262 0.366273622748 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.284360189573 0.280924506359 101% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.176935229068 0.200843997647 88% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.116903633491 0.132149295362 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82087636664 2.79330140395 101% => OK
Unique words: 337.0 219.290929204 154% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532385466035 0.48968727796 109% => OK
Word variations: 69.1798710258 55.4138127331 125% => OK
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6194690265 150% => OK
Sentence length: 20.4193548387 23.380412469 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.9981699808 59.4972553346 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.290322581 141.124799967 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4193548387 23.380412469 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.451612903226 0.674092028746 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.21349557522 173% => OK
Readability: 48.8553737961 51.4728631049 95% => OK
Elegance: 1.34375 1.64882698954 81% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331565567537 0.391690518653 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0876335887318 0.123202303941 71% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0602721683442 0.077325440228 78% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.451238496117 0.547984918172 82% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.171919285685 0.149214159877 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105148045819 0.161403998019 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.077975924337 0.0892212321368 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.299368831372 0.385218514788 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.160530253005 0.0692045440612 232% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212940550061 0.275328986314 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649558740624 0.0653680567796 99% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 10.4325221239 211% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.30420353982 113% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 7.22455752212 180% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 3.66592920354 164% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.70907079646 37% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.5995575221 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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