Colleges and universities should require their students to spend at least one semester studying in a foreign country.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Studying outside of your comfort zone in a foreign country has become a popular route for many college students. The prompt suggests that colleges should require students to spend at least one year studying abroad. In my opinion, I mostly disagree with this recommendation and suggest that students should not study abroad for two reasons.
To begin, the idea of going to an unknown area can produce negative outcomes to towards their friendships. There have been many studies recently that have looked at the reasons for development of depression and anxiety. One study focused on the main reason why people are not happy with their lives. They looked at many individuals through a span of multiple years and asked them what they would have changed in order to make their life better. A large amount of the subjects stated that they wished they would have had a stronger foundation of friendships throughout their life. This suggests that people should be more focused on deepening their relationships rather than create new ones. When students go to a foreign country they are totally isolated from their family and friends that they grew up with. This can put a toll on many students as they end up looking for new friends in an area where they are totally unfamiliar with; this can lead to a development of anxiety and depression. The student however, might make some close friends in the short time they are there, but that will quickly end when they go back to their own country. In the end the student ends up hurting their prior relationships and ultimately wasting a semester of their life with the burden of now having to build their relationships back up.
Secondly, studying in a different environment can be a difficult task that already adds to the complexity of college itself. For example, if a student is going to a country where the spoken language deviates from their own, it can be a struggle to adjust. The student will end up spending a majority of their time trying to understand the words and fine nuances of their new teacher and classmate. This will likely effect their success in school because they may not be focused on the material they are supposed to be learning. If the student is studying abroad to specifically learn a new language, then they will fall behind in classes that they would have taken if they stayed at the college they were originally at. There also will be many distractions because the student is not used to the environment they are in so the time it takes them to adjust will just add to things they need to accomplish in the time they are.
In conclusion, although the idea of studying abroad may have some benefits for students who are willing to adjust to change, the consequences outweigh the benefits. For this reason, the recommendation for a required semester outside a student’s native country should not be recommended.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, at least, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 33.0505617978 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2402.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 497.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83299798793 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59642024463 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474849094567 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 726.3 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.7754308316 60.3974514979 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 114.380952381 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 5.21951772744 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232244118378 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.094762869992 0.0831039109588 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746157148266 0.0758088955206 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195543783864 0.150359130593 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0888640764498 0.0667264976115 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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