Claim: Imagination is a more valuable asset than experience.
Reason: People who lack experience are free to imagine what is possible without the constraints of established habits and attitudes.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
The success of a business relies on both imagination as well as experience; an individual must first come up with an idea that jumpstarts their road to success, and then they must build around that by gaining new experiences to become more knowledgable in their desired field. The prompt recommends that imagination has a higher value than experiences, due to the fact that experience diminishes the effect on what they might think is possible. I strongly disagree with this statement and argue that experience trumps imagination for 2 reasons.
To begin, most companies require experiences, not imagination, as a prerequisite for a desired job. For example, doctors are required to attend a college for atleast eight years. Within these 8 years an individual will learn an immense amount of information. A person can not apply to be a doctor without the certification that they would get through a college degree. This is due to the fact that hospitals need someone that has enough experience in order correctly assess and diagnose a patient. Another field of practice that requires experience is an accountant, and this job also requires a certification before an individual is able to work for a company. This is because an accountant keeps track of the financial side of a company and one mistake can impact a business greatly. In both of these prior examples it is experience that is required, rather than the ability to imagine, that gets a person the job.
Secondly, imagination cannot happen without an experience that causes a new idea to form. For example, Bill Gates is thought highly for his invention of Microsoft. Although it is true that Bill Gates clearly has a great imagination, it is the experiences he went through that planted the seed in his head to create a well-known computer company. His habits of always thinking outside of the box and attitude toward his work ethic were main contributers to his success. This was shown in a past interview where he talked about how he rose to the top of the computer world. He was very intrigued about computers and the way they work which led him to pursue a dream that led to Microsoft. He stated that he was fond of computers before he created Microsoft. Which means that there were events that influenced his predilection and ultimately led to his invention of Microsoft.
In conclusion, it is logical to think that a person with experience becomes more bias towards their specific habits and attitudes compared to someone who is more imaginative and open to more possibilities. However, a person who is open to many possibilities is also bias in their own way; they can be ignorant to the fact that building off of experience, is a tantamount, possibly even better, way of logically thinking than always keeping an open mind to different possibilities. Experience is a top imagination when it comes to which is a better asset to have, and experience is what drives imagination ultimately.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 54, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...f a business relies on both imagination as well as experience; an individual must first co...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ely led to his invention of Microsoft. In conclusion, it is logical to think th...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 27.0 11.3162921348 239% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 57.0 33.0505617978 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2468.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 500.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.936 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92936238796 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 785.7 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5282968707 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.181818182 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7272727273 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 5.21951772744 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201178522396 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615516649981 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748923720435 0.0758088955206 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134171958922 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0798829541395 0.0667264976115 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.