Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In dev

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Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position

Since the very beginning, the competition holds enormously significance in one’s life. Sometimes, it is essential to increase one’s motivation. Additionally, it provides to see ourselves’ position in the race then, eventually galvanizing us to reach to goals that we have determined for our lives. However, is competition a means to convey people to better positions? Does it affect only people positively?

First of all, competition is existing for everyone regardless age. For instance, a student, assume that student took an exam then saw oneself in lower success compared to student’s classmates. What would happen in this situation? Of course, he or she will feel the kind of pressure and lowly then, generating the ambition to show higher success than other students. However, the main point is appeared in this term. How much the quality of learning under the influence of strong competition? Could student learn what he or she should learn fully accurate and permanent? Most of students probably would prefer to not learn properly but memorize magnificently to show better success than their peers. They might seem to be digested the knowledge but they are partly learnt. It is surely not good learning style and it is sad to say that the competition causes this unfavorable conclusion.

Despite the first assumption, there is a possibility that it would happen totally in opposite direction. The students who are wise about the future and more mature than their peers would certainly think that the competition is the tool to carry themselves to better places, not to get themselves going for temporary and baseless success. This thought provides them to pursue their education and dreams in proper way of learning which is not memorizing. It would keep the quality of learning in appropriate manner.

As a conclusion, competition is sometimes useful to reach to high degrees but sometimes could limit the quality of learning at all levels of education. Competition should use as a tool of conveying people to better positions in every field and every age.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, then, for instance, kind of, of course, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 336.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25892857143 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94272705204 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568452380952 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.0016760022 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.1428571429 118.986275619 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85714285714 5.21951772744 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164502759561 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0470706355839 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481729842782 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104386385997 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372560766527 0.0667264976115 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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