Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
In such a competitive and monotonous world, competition is present everywhere. Be it school level, college level or any professional sphere, people are all, knowingly or unknowingly, in a rat race to be at the top. It is quite common among students to aim for higher marks and grades and the competition gets tougher and tougher, as time flies. But I believe this competition is in some way useful and desirable.
Having a fixed goal and aim in life, be it a short term or long term, is very essential. It keeps the people motivated and strive towards it. Among school students, there exists severe competition among all peers to score higher marks and grades. With this goal, students often indulge in devoting more time towards their academics. This improves or provides an opportunity for students to learn more and improve their knowledge base. Their methods and approach towards learning improves and this results in improvising their quality of learning. For example, entrance exams like JEE and CAT exams require students to seriously compete to be among the rank holders. Yearning for higher grades surely helps them improve their approach and thereby their quality of learning by enrolling in extra classes, learning from peers etc.
Having this competitive mindset helps students to be always focused in order to achieve success. This is not just limited to a particular class or level, such students, with regular practice and determined aim, tend to lend in more efforts in achieving their target. For example, class 12 board exams strictly adhere to NCERT curriculum for their mode of learning. Different competitive exams are based on CBSE syllabus. For all other non CBSE students, exams provide them with an opportunity to enhance their knowledge by studying or referring the CBSE books as well. This competition helps students, from non CBSE background, to improve their methods and quality of learning.
However, I do believe that in some ways competition may demand too much from students. Studying from different books different syllabus focusing on other aspects of life too seems to be a Herculean task. With sole aim of attaining good grades, students tend to find nooks and crooked ways of attaining their result. This however can affect their learning in a detrimental way. In conclusion, however the most important thing is to achieve good grades for students and competition helps students to perform better than others. Some strive harder some may not, however I don’t believe that the quality of learning is seriously affected in any level. On the other hand, it keeps the students motivated and focused to learn and work more for achieving their results or goals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 36, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'ways'' or 'way's'?
Suggestion: ways'; way's
.... However, I do believe that in some ways competition may demand too much from st...
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Line 7, column 356, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a detrimental way" with adverb for "detrimental"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... This however can affect their learning in a detrimental way. In conclusion, however the most import...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, well, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.3162921348 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2264.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 443.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11060948081 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60934021351 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474040632054 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.9742086259 60.3974514979 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.56 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.72 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.12 5.21951772744 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150703951642 0.243740707755 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0479156070268 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0287477222995 0.0758088955206 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107308629823 0.150359130593 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0115757223767 0.0667264976115 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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