cooperation not competion
The issue at hand is whether we should help the younger generation become ready for leadership roles by making them understand the sense of cooperation rather than competition. Although competition sharpens our skills, but the best traits of becoming a leader is by working along with others instead of fighting them.
Competition is necessary to bring the best out of a person or organization whih inturn helps to develop mankind. For example XBox and Playstation are two big names in the gaming console space. Cut-throat competition among them helps to bring the latest and greatest features to their users, hence making great strides in this space. However, what time has shown is that competition has detrimental effects in the long turn. Taking the above example, although these two giants are trying to be the best, but Playstation is loosing tremendous amount of money and might go bankrupt if this trend continues. Reading through the pages of history, we are taught again and again that competition leads to downfall. For example, the infamous Worlds War I and II were outcomes of competing among various nation leaders. Had they never competed, but lived in cooperation, such disasters wouldn't have happened.
A sense of cooperation is needed to work hand in hand with the people thereby making the result a success. A great example is the first Prime Minister of India, Jawaharlal Nehru. After independence of India, Nehru worked with leaders of other countries like UK, US, Japan and made strong bonds that helped in the development of India, a country that lacked resources and was in a state of turmoil just after independence. Working together with other big leaders taught him how to be an effective leader, the knowledge which he implemented to make India prosper as a developing nation. If he had competed with other countries, wars would have broken out and India might not have developed. Hence, cooperation gives pragmatic knowledge from others that are essential for a leader to plan his actions.
In conclusion, cooperation is essential for the development of a organization and even a nation because it helps to combine the strength of all the people striving towards a common goal, while competition makes one alone in his endeavours. Therefore, in my opinion we must teach the younger generation to learn about working together
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: wouldn't
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Suggestion: prospers
...edge which he implemented to make India prosper as a developing nation. If he had compe...
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Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1976.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 387.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10594315245 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75757208558 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586563307494 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7450599322 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.777777778 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27777777778 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124686979956 0.243740707755 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0344066616737 0.0831039109588 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0492507358688 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0701559172238 0.150359130593 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279875280069 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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