"Nosinia is an herb that many users report to be as effective as prescription medications at fighting allergy symptoms. Researchers recently compared Nosinia to a placebo in 95 men and women with seasonal allergies to ragweed pollen. Participants in the study reported that neither Nosinia nor the placebo offered significant relief. However, for the most severe allergy symptoms, the researchers reported that Nosinia was more effective than the placebo in providing relief. Furthermore, at the end of the study, participants given Nosinia were more likely than participants given a placebo to report feeling healthier.We therefore recommend using Nosinia to help with your severe allergy symptoms.
The argument at hand is that Nosinia is equally effective as prescription medicines to fight allergy, based on a research on 95 people. However it doesnot provide reasonable answers to questions like whether a small sample size of 95 people is enough to reach a conclusion about a herb, hence failing to make a cogent case to recommend using Nosinia for severe allergies.
Firstly, no details of the participants and the placebo had been mentioned in the newsletter. If they were believers in the effectiveness of Ayurveda compared to medicinal pills, they would create a subconscious feeling that the herb will work better than any pill. Lack of information about the placebo makes it even hard to establish the testing conditions. Had the placebo been a simple pill to look at, the former mentioned feeling among the participants will increase making the results skewed since the beginning.
Moreover there is no mention about whether the small sample of 95 participants knew about the claimed effectiveness of the herb. If they had known about the properties of Nosinia before the experiment, they would subconsciously treat the herb as the superior medicine. This might explain the participants given Nosinia feel more healthier than the other group. To establish their claims scientifically, medical procedures like blood test, heart beat and pressure measurements should have been taken and compared to their previous selves.
In conclusion, the study showing the effectiveness of Nosinia doesn't give a clear picture of the conditions used in the experiment, hence making the results not self-sustaining. In my opinion, the newsletter should have asked for more number of participants and their past knowledge about the herb before coming to a decision about the effectiveness of the herb.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 288 350
No. of Characters: 1483 1500
No. of Different Words: 157 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.12 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.149 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.94 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.176 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.381 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.604 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.05 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 112, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...on medicines to fight allergy, based on a research on 95 people. However it doesnot provid...
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Line 1, column 137, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ergy, based on a research on 95 people. However it doesnot provide reasonable answers t...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
... results skewed since the beginning. Moreover there is no mention about whether the s...
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Line 5, column 325, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'healthier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: healthier
...ain the participants given Nosinia feel more healthier than the other group. To establish thei...
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Line 7, column 63, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...dy showing the effectiveness of Nosinia doesnt give a clear picture of the conditions ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, moreover, so, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 13.6137724551 15% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1518.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 287.0 441.139720559 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28919860627 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.007212897 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557491289199 0.468620217663 119% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 705.55239521 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9194830068 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.5 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9166666667 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.70786347227 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205502076898 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795417409427 0.0743258471296 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501004475123 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129751426271 0.128457276422 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337716724474 0.0628817314937 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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