"Creating an appealing image has become more important in contemporary society than is the reality or truth behind that image."
The speaker of this statement clearly believes that in today’s world, people focus more on how they or things appear in front of others, rather than showing what the reality is. I totally am in accord with this assertion and believe that people just want to appear in a way that they think could be beneficial to them. These people may be mentally broken or ill-willed, or have some characters because of which people may avoid being with them.
Take an example of a typical politician, who, to gain votes try to look good in front of people, tries to show how much good work he has done or can do. But the reality is majority of these politicians have some bad history behind them. Some of them have committed crimes, some of them are corrupt, and some want to just gain fame or money. There are very few politicians who actually want to do something good for the people and do not hesitate to show their real face. No wonder why, people nowadays do not really want to believe what these politicians say in their campaigns.
Another example of people showing apparent nature can be students in schools or colleges. To become popular and appealing, and to gain respect from fellow students, they try to look very modest, sophisticated and cool, but in reality do not have such qualities and therefore do not have many friends. Some students also try to appear hardworking, smart and attentive in front of their teachers to gain attention and good grades, but may not really have these qualities.
Another very good example can be people’s factitious behaviour in social circles. Most people just want to look happy and appealing to others, while, the reality is most of these people are having various problems, depressions, stress, etc.
Sometimes, they feel that looking appealing can take them ahead of people in the race. But if you really pay attention, all successful and great people have one important quality backing them that is their ‘real’ nature. The successful people about whom we read in magazines or newspaper and hear every now and then in television, etc., do not really pay attention to their apparent image in front of others, but they focus on how their image is in their mind. On the other hand, people who try to appear different from what they really are, eventually show their real image to the world, which often causes them to lose all the respect or good-will they deserved.
In conclusion, I agree with the speaker’s assertion and believe that its best when a person keeps their real self in front of others. This kind of behaviour encourages a veracious relationship between individuals. Being real always, also have other merits, like – someone might help you out of your problem, or guide you through it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 246, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ious problems, depressions, stress, etc. Sometimes, they feel that looking appeal...
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Line 9, column 308, Rule ID: EVERY_NOW_AND_THEN[1]
Message: Use simply 'now and then'.
Suggestion: now and then
...read in magazines or newspaper and hear every now and then in television, etc., do not really pay ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, look, may, really, so, then, therefore, while, in conclusion, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 14.8657303371 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2302.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 476.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83613445378 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55471168573 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478991596639 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 698.4 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 9.0 1.77640449438 507% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.79174031 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.1 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0580862229431 0.243740707755 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0205735216247 0.0831039109588 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0268324438186 0.0758088955206 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0315677897582 0.150359130593 21% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0157372473236 0.0667264976115 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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