The author believes that even though most people are taught that loyalty is a virtue, it is most often destructive than is positive. I, however, only slightly agree with the author’s beliefs and I feel that there are many cases where loyalty served out to be constructive. I think that it is dependent on various factors like – the persons involved, the conditions, the merit or demerit of being loyal, etc.
There are many cases where being loyal is destructive. Such a case usually occurs when the person or the idea being followed is destructive itself. For example, consider a person who is loyal to a group of thieves. Now this person although being loyal, promotes destruction. He might have good relations with his teammates, the robbery might be beneficial to him for the time, but in the long run, when this person is caught, his loyalty to a wrong idea becomes destructive for him and his family.
There are, however, many cases where loyalty is constructive. Cases where the person or idea being followed is good, often results in benefits for those who are loyal. For example, consider a freedom fighter who is loyal to his nation. This person is loyal to a noble cause and although being loyal to his country may sometimes be destructive to him, in the long run, this person does a constructive work for his country and all its citizen.
Loyalty, in my opinion, should always be taught as a virtue if the cause is good. Doing so helps a person to get good morals.
So, in conclusion, I would like to restate my view that, loyalty can be both – constructive and destructive. It depends on the situation how it goes out in the end. I also believe that loyalty should be continued to be taught as a virtue as it facilitates moral upbringing of a person.
The author believes that even though most people are taught that loyalty is a virtue, it is most often destructive than is positive. I, however, only slightly agree with the author’s beliefs and I feel that there are many cases where loyalty served out to be constructive. I think that it is dependent on various factors like – the persons involved, the conditions, the merit or demerit of being loyal, etc.
There are many cases where being loyal is destructive. Such a case usually occurs when the person or the idea being followed is destructive itself. For example, consider a person who is loyal to a group of thieves. Now this person although being loyal, promotes destruction. He might have good relations with his teammates, the robbery might be beneficial to him for the time, but in the long run, when this person is caught, his loyalty to a wrong idea becomes destructive for him and his family.
There are, however, many cases where loyalty is constructive. Cases where the person or idea being followed is good, often results in benefits for those who are loyal. For example, consider a freedom fighter who is loyal to his nation. This person is loyal to a noble cause and although being loyal to his country may sometimes be destructive to him, in the long run, this person does a constructive work for his country and all its citizen.
Loyalty, in my opinion, should always be taught as a virtue if the cause is good. Doing so helps a person to get good morals.
So, in conclusion, I would like to restate my view that, loyalty can be both – constructive and destructive. It depends on the situation how it goes out in the end. I also believe that loyalty should be continued to be taught as a virtue as it facilitates moral upbringing of a person.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 58.6224719101 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1467.0 2235.4752809 66% => OK
No of words: 314.0 442.535393258 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67197452229 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63784447179 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 215.323595506 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484076433121 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 704.065955056 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.754855564 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.2941176471 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4705882353 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35294117647 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285327371585 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11759981319 0.0831039109588 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.189352161828 0.0758088955206 250% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201607008562 0.150359130593 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.257999289223 0.0667264976115 387% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 14.1392134831 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.8420337079 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.1743820225 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 100.480337079 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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