"The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that
it has become a more important form of documentation than written records."
The speaker here states that the video camera is such a device that can provide accurate and convincing records of anything in today’s world and that it has become a more important form of documentation that written records. However, I feel that the speaker has overstated the importance of video camera. According to me, a video camera is an important documenting device but there are many cases in which it is of no use. Also, the assertion that video recordings are more important than written records for documentation feels inaccurate to me. There are various cases in which video recording is not possible or of little use.
Video camera can definitely produce more accurate record of the events that are visible. It can record word by word conversation or dialogues of the person/people in focus. It can give better details and in a more convincing way than written records. It can show the background in which an event occurred, or how it occurred. Also, it can give another dimension to those events in ways which could not be expressed in written formats. Moreover, video recordings can show the intensity with which an event occurred, like – how violent was the storm yesterday or how much the crowd was excited in a recent football match.
Video recordings are faster than written documents, in providing information. It can be used in numerous cases where the need is to record, store and replay a chain of events. Consider the case of a cricket match where the on-field umpire is unable to take a decision. In such a case, video recordings have proven to be of great importance, since, they can accurately replay the event many times. If there would have been a written record describing the event it would be inappropriate to take a decision based on this record, since, it could lead to a lot of controversies.
However, there is a drawback in video recorded documents, that – to record an event in video, the event should occur physically and be visible, that is, only events that can be seen could be recorded. If the object of interest is not visible, then there is no way in which that can be documented as a video. For example, when a novelist imagines a scene, that scene cannot be recorded as a video since it never actually occurred. Such scene can only be recorded in written form. Similarly, any imagination or any idea cannot be video recorded directly without the help of a certain physical medium.
Video recordings are also of no use, where numeric data or statistical data is considered. For example, in a movie theatre, if the manager asks how many people came to watch movies, it would be really inappropriate to see the video of people entering the theatre, from start to end, in order to get a count of people. In such a case, having a written record would be really helpful as it can provide data instantly. Another example could be where a farmer keeps his record of how much kilograms of grain is ready to be sold. Now this record could be measured and recorded in written format but it would be awkward to record a video of farmer measuring the weight of grain that could provide data in future.
Also talking in technical terms, video recording takes up a lot of storage, and recording video for trifling things would be way costlier than recording them in written format. So video recordings should only be done in those cases, where keeping the video is worth the storage cost, else, it would be really better to have written records.
In conclusion, I would state my point that in some cases, video recording may prove to be of utmost importance but in certain scenarios, keeping written records are far more beneficial than keeping video records and hence, the speakers’ assertion that video records are more important than written records is not always true.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 311, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...rstated the importance of video camera. According to me, a video camera is an important documen...
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Line 3, column 252, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...re convincing way than written records. It can show the background in which an eve...
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Line 5, column 407, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had been'?
Suggestion: had been
...y replay the event many times. If there would have been a written record describing the event i...
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Line 9, column 481, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... where a farmer keeps his record of how much kilograms of grain is ready to be sold....
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Line 9, column 697, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...weight of grain that could provide data in future. Also talking in technical terms, vi...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...n that could provide data in future. Also talking in technical terms, video recor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, hence, however, if, may, moreover, really, similarly, so, then, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 46.0 19.5258426966 236% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 33.0 12.4196629213 266% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 27.0 11.3162921348 239% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3170.0 2235.4752809 142% => OK
No of words: 663.0 442.535393258 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78129713424 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.07432619952 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63874067436 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.399698340875 0.4932671777 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1019.7 704.065955056 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.7133378557 60.3974514979 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.310344828 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8620689655 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.62068965517 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.97078651685 141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.83258426966 290% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303744662853 0.243740707755 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116558504951 0.0831039109588 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0936662681497 0.0758088955206 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197109275809 0.150359130593 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0981782800368 0.0667264976115 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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