"The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that
it has become a more important form of documentation than written records."
history of individuals or a country is important because later generations can study it to understand the cornerstones of their society. Nowadays there are two forms of recording important documents. some people believe that written documents which have been prevalent throughout history are still the most accurate means of recording. However, proponents to this idea who are attracted toward using new technology advancements tell that people, politicians and historians should equip themselves with video cameras in order to record events. Although we cannot overlook the role of videos and the significance of it, I believe that written records are still the most accurate and convincing way of recording.
Firstly, when people want to study history, they need to understand the references of a claim. In a documentary movie or recorded film of an event the referencing is quite hard. Director of the movie should focus on a piece of paper in order to strengthen his or her claim. However, the author of a written documentary is able to refer his allegation by using just one sentence. Moreover, a written document contains more information than movies. For example, the reader can understand the number of people signing it, the date of the event, etc.
Secondly, recording every single event is not only an arduous and time-consuming task but also expensive. Despite the prevalence of having the smartphone, some events happen in the blink of an eye and the person is not able to show an immediate reaction in order to record the event by his smartphone. Furthermore, it is needed to spend a considerable amount of time to extract an important thing from a recorded video. Take a senate meeting as an example. The senators argue together to introduce a new rule and the final result is a piece of paper regarding effects and details of the rule. All the 8 hours meeting's result is concluded in that paper. If someone to understand the rule, he should spend 8 hours to watch the long and mundane film.
In conclusion, I believe that written documents play a pivotal role in recording historical events.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, then, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1770.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 351.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04273504274 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86694351227 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561253561254 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.2892097256 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1578947368 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4736842105 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42105263158 5.21951772744 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204703180743 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615452622367 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562814292329 0.0758088955206 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120564093196 0.150359130593 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0382487203895 0.0667264976115 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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